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běiměifēng shǒuyè -> 西方文学 Western Literature fābiǎoxīntiè   huífùtièzǐ
Snow Burning
白水
大学士


zhùcèshíjiān: 2006-10-02
tièzǐ: 14102
láizì: TORONTO
白水běiměifēngwénjí
tièzǐfābiǎoyú: 2008-02-23 22:14:07    fābiǎozhùtí: Snow Burning yǐnyòngbìnghuífù

Snow Burning

“Snow burning, snow burning”
wind whispers.
but I could not find,
where are the fire?

“Snow burning, snow burning”
wind blows.
I close my eyes,
but could not feel,
the smoke and the warmth.

“Snow burning, snow burning”
the wind cries.
I look around,
ashes cover ashes,
lay down on the land,
and I hearing that
a bird singing on a tree:

“Snow burning,
the snow burning.”
fǎnyèshǒu
yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào fāsòngsīrénliúyán 博客
kino
秀才


zhùcèshíjiān: 2006-12-23
tièzǐ: 411
láizì: beijing
kinoběiměifēngwénjí
tièzǐfābiǎoyú: 2008-02-23 23:35:42    fābiǎozhùtí: yǐnyòngbìnghuífù

Snow Burning
雪在燃烧

“Snow burning, snow burning”
wind whispers.
but I could not find,
where are the fire?
“雪在燃烧,雪在燃烧”
风轻轻地说
但是我却看不到
火在哪里?

“Snow burning, snow burning”
wind blows.
I close my eyes,
but could not feel,
the smoke and the warmth.
“雪在燃烧,雪在燃烧”
风掠过
我闭上眼睛
却不能感觉
那烟和温暖

“Snow burning, snow burning”
the wind cries.
I look around,
ashes cover ashes,
lay down on the land,
and I hearing that
a bird singing on a tree:
“雪在燃烧,雪在燃烧”
风呼号着
我环顾四周
灰烬成堆
躺在这片大地上
我听到
鸟儿在枝头吟唱


“Snow burning,
the snow burning.”
“雪儿在燃烧,
那雪在燃烧”。

Very Happy 边读边译~~~
fǎnyèshǒu
yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào fāsòngsīrénliúyán fāsòngdiànzǐyóujiàn 博客 liúlǎnfābiǎozhědezhùyè
白水
大学士


zhùcèshíjiān: 2006-10-02
tièzǐ: 14102
láizì: TORONTO
白水běiměifēngwénjí
tièzǐfābiǎoyú: 2008-02-24 03:34:43    fābiǎozhùtí: yǐnyòngbìnghuífù

谢谢你, 我懒了一下, 没译成中文. Very Happy
fǎnyèshǒu
yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào fāsòngsīrénliúyán 博客
kino
秀才


zhùcèshíjiān: 2006-12-23
tièzǐ: 411
láizì: beijing
kinoběiměifēngwénjí
tièzǐfābiǎoyú: 2008-02-25 05:35:54    fābiǎozhùtí: yǐnyòngbìnghuífù

白水 Moonlight xièdào:
谢谢你, 我懒了一下, 没译成中文. Very Happy

翻的不好,莫怪~~
fǎnyèshǒu
yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào fāsòngsīrénliúyán fāsòngdiànzǐyóujiàn 博客 liúlǎnfābiǎozhědezhùyè
Lake
举人


zhùcèshíjiān: 2007-01-09
tièzǐ: 1286

Lakeběiměifēngwénjí
tièzǐfābiǎoyú: 2008-02-25 13:13:11    fābiǎozhùtí: yǐnyòngbìnghuífù

Kino 快手快脚。

改语法错误比改诗容易。像这两句:

yǐnyòng:
but I could not find,
where are the fire?


but I could not find
where the fire is.

or simply,

but I could not find
the fire.

yǐnyòng:
and I hearing that
a bird singing on a tree:


and I hear
a bird singing on a tree

当然只是个人意见,其他人可能有不同的看法。你的诗,你决定。
_________________
the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins
fǎnyèshǒu
yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào fāsòngsīrénliúyán 博客
白水
大学士


zhùcèshíjiān: 2006-10-02
tièzǐ: 14102
láizì: TORONTO
白水běiměifēngwénjí
tièzǐfābiǎoyú: 2008-02-25 13:51:28    fābiǎozhùtí: yǐnyòngbìnghuífù

lake, thanks a lot. i will think it carefuly, after i complete my homework Sad Very Happy
fǎnyèshǒu
yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào fāsòngsīrénliúyán 博客
William Zhou周道模
探花


zhùcèshíjiān: 2007-06-10
tièzǐ: 3950
láizì: 中国四川广汉
William Zhou周道模běiměifēngwénjí
tièzǐfābiǎoyú: 2008-02-28 17:13:34    fābiǎozhùtí: yǐnyòngbìnghuífù

i like to read the poem aloud!

"lay down on the land"---- on the ground ?
_________________
诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
周道模
fǎnyèshǒu
yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào fāsòngsīrénliúyán 博客 liúlǎnfābiǎozhědezhùyè
cóngyǐqiándetièzǐkāishǐxiǎnshì:   
biǎoqíngtúàn
Very Happy Smile Sad Surprised
Shocked Confused Cool Laughing
Mad Razz Embarassed Crying or Very sad
Evil or Very Mad Twisted Evil Rolling Eyes Wink
Exclamation Question Idea Arrow
gèngduōbiǎoqíngtúàn
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