白水
大学士
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 发表于: 2008-02-23 22:14:07 发表主题: Snow Burning |
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Snow Burning
“Snow burning, snow burning”
wind whispers.
but I could not find,
where are the fire?
“Snow burning, snow burning”
wind blows.
I close my eyes,
but could not feel,
the smoke and the warmth.
“Snow burning, snow burning”
the wind cries.
I look around,
ashes cover ashes,
lay down on the land,
and I hearing that
a bird singing on a tree:
“Snow burning,
the snow burning.” |
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kino
秀才
注册时间: 2006-12-23
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来自: beijing
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| 发表于: 2008-02-23 23:35:42 发表主题: |
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Snow Burning
雪在燃烧
“Snow burning, snow burning”
wind whispers.
but I could not find,
where are the fire?
“雪在燃烧，雪在燃烧”
风轻轻地说
但是我却看不到
火在哪里？
“Snow burning, snow burning”
wind blows.
I close my eyes,
but could not feel,
the smoke and the warmth.
“雪在燃烧，雪在燃烧”
风掠过
我闭上眼睛
却不能感觉
那烟和温暖
“Snow burning, snow burning”
the wind cries.
I look around,
ashes cover ashes,
lay down on the land,
and I hearing that
a bird singing on a tree:
“雪在燃烧，雪在燃烧”
风呼号着
我环顾四周
灰烬成堆
躺在这片大地上
我听到
鸟儿在枝头吟唱
“Snow burning,
the snow burning.”
“雪儿在燃烧，
那雪在燃烧”。
 边读边译~~~ |
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白水
大学士
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| 发表于: 2008-02-24 03:34:43 发表主题: |
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| 谢谢你, 我懒了一下, 没译成中文. |
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kino
秀才
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来自: beijing
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| 发表于: 2008-02-25 05:35:54 发表主题: |
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| 白水 Moonlight 写到: |
| 谢谢你, 我懒了一下, 没译成中文. |
翻的不好，莫怪~~ |
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Lake
举人
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| 发表于: 2008-02-25 13:13:11 发表主题: |
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Kino 快手快脚。
改语法错误比改诗容易。像这两句：
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but I could not find,
where are the fire? |
but I could not find
where the fire is.
or simply,
but I could not find
the fire.
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and I hearing that
a bird singing on a tree: |
and I hear
a bird singing on a tree
当然只是个人意见，其他人可能有不同的看法。你的诗，你决定。
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins |
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白水
大学士
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| 发表于: 2008-02-25 13:51:28 发表主题: |
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lake, thanks a lot. i will think it carefuly, after i complete my homework  |
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William Zhou周道模
探花
注册时间: 2007-06-10
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来自: 中国四川广汉
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| 发表于: 2008-02-28 17:13:34 发表主题: |
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i like to read the poem aloud!
"lay down on the land"---- on the ground ?
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