ZY
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 Posted: 2007-03-01 07:54:54 Post subject: 菊花--偶思盆地十四行 |
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疏离者流我想
必乃菊花其于秋末冬初
晓风将起冷日悄升
静立某某城沿之山腰
西望河曲上虹桥独定
无声承载羁旅行路的车马流窜
我想，疏离者
无非一偶归的中年客
行过河口不远处的桥
了望河海交际的浅滩
水鸟、来回的渡轮
而发现心情如苔
也如滚动不已的石子
当日子也滚动不已一如石子
1/20/2007
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沙漠
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| Posted: 2007-03-01 16:36:02 Post subject: |
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疏离者流我想——“流我想”是什么意思：）
问好！
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三色堇
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| Posted: 2007-03-01 18:39:54 Post subject: |
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| 把有的句子梳理一下,会好些. |
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白水
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| Posted: 2007-03-01 19:02:37 Post subject: |
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两地的写作习惯不太相同, 但能感觉到离去归来的悲欢和思索......不知我的理解对吗?  |
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ZY
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| Posted: 2007-03-02 03:13:31 Post subject: |
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多謝三位讀詩.
那句作"疏离者流，我想 "的讀法.
確如白水所說,有時,我們不定把斷句弄得很清楚.
問好三位.
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