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 妳来到的时候我紧握妳的双手
妳来到的时候我紧握妳的双手
真想挣脱这茧蛹般的时分
枝前叶下将世界拥抱迎唇
爱惜那呢喃软语的温存,象
数星一样把你无尽的亲吻
真想环抱着你前戏的腰身
感触妳如波漾开的+2度温
谜雨斜种大地, 薄薄咬痕
细细听忖, 流水似有来声
敲敲你紧锁已久的窗深,让
纯净的灵魂共同出趟远门
真想牵妳的小手, 前世今生
并接住妳那欲滴还收的眼神
真想得到你泪眼下的首肯
这世界的永恒只剩下我们
2007-08-30 04:17:53 |
| 白水 ?2007-08-30 05:49:05?? |  |
新音古韵 
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| Lake ?2007-08-30 09:35:29?? | |
博弈 也写歌了
还是 couplet 呢
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| 博弈 ?2007-08-30 18:49:26?? | |
This is depicting intercourse, or in a way "the world to a man" to some folks when they see what they also felt. It could also be read in an innocent way like you did.
I hold tight your hands when you are coming. 
Sex is the most beautiful thing between lives.
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| nobody ?2007-08-30 20:54:16?? | |
看了解释再读，有身临其境的感觉。 
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| kokho ?2007-08-30 22:53:58?? | |
mark is in love ... congratulation !!!
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| 博弈 ?2007-08-31 02:23:16?? | |
actually, in love or not, I am in Taipei still, will be back to SFO next week.
K 鈞心細, 好久沒寫情事與情詩了, 近來可能有此情勢.
想著一個女人呢, 現在練習練習,哈哈. 你也替我複習複習,轉幾片靈感來.
再即筆來一個熱身; 評議由賞
<瓶愛>
有一個瓶子叫望穿
琉璃獸耳錦瑟無端
我對著他說: 想妳--
與一個瓶塞貪戀妳
我愛你的聲音
存放在瓶裡保鮮
一天一遍
一遍一遍一遍
一天天
漂在宇宙的河川
我在瓶的裡邊
妳在我的裡面
我是一個望穿叫想念
愛戀在瓶底不能沉澱
別人睜眼雅都不能看見
直到妳來摸摸甁頸
我的吻就精靈如煙, 化成
圍著你的珠玉項鍊
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| Lake ?2007-08-31 03:23:02?? | |
you are quite a character.
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| 半溪明月 ?2007-08-31 07:30:11?? | |
| 博弈 写到: |
This is depicting intercourse, or in a way "the world to a man" to some folks when they see what they also felt. It could also be read in an innocent way like you did.
I hold tight your hands when you are coming.
Sex is the most beautiful thing between lives. |
为什么不用中文，说哑语，欺负我们不懂英语哈～呵呵，看懂了后两句！
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| 杨海军 ?2007-08-31 13:43:36?? | |
诗行云流水，优美不失张力。不错！！
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