|
北美枫文集
Lake
|
|
?????121?
?????2007-01-09
????? ?????Lake's blog 查找Lake发表的所有帖子 ???the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins 胡礼忠2010-11-15 05:21:45拜访老师、颂冬祺！ Lake2010-01-16 09:05:12Thank you. 我家三儿2010-01-07 05:21:39我叫太阳每天把幸福的阳光洒在你身上，我叫月亮每天给你一个甜美的梦境，祝愿你事事如意！ Lake2008-11-04 11:04:13Thanks. hepingdao2008-11-04 10:52:29congratulations!
and you can configure to show or not to show those articles from bbs |
|
|
| 西方文学 Western Literature |
 
|
 Haiku (71-80)
71
Circles on the pond
Stir ripples of memory
Rainbows in water
72
The moon's left at dawn
The rooster calls the sun up
A brand new day sings
73
Purpose without art -
Petals open one by one
Art found in purpose
74
The days never end
So we can make our ends meet
Seasonal cycle
75
Lords of Illusion
failed to illude a young mind -
"The King is unclothed!"
76
"Till death us do part"-
pledge lasts for generations
Does it really work?
77
The universe hummed
As rivers surged, mountains shook -
A grand symphony
78
Not in this instance -
Harder you work, better results.
It needs natural gifts
79
Pie-crust promises-
Like "draw water with baskets"
We buy what we see.
80
Butterfly kisses
Like a spring shower on flowers
Bees become jealous
2007-08-29 19:08:43 |
| kokho ?2007-08-29 20:42:50?? Re: Haiku (71-80) |  |
| Lake 写到: |
71
Circles on the pond
Stir ripples of memory
Rainbows in water
《》rainbow is swimming ...
73
Purpose without art -
Petals open one by one
Art found in purpose
<> Arts flourish in life
74
The days never end
So we can make our ends meet
Seasonal cycle
<> Only dream cycles
75
Lords of Illusion
failed to illude a young mind -
"The King is unclothed!"
illude ? allude ? too old a story..
78
Not in this instance -
Harder you work, better results. - 8
It needs natural gifts
<> don't you dare complain...
i didn't care for the rest (多义)
one enlightenment !
79
Pie-crust promises-
Like "draw water with baskets"
We buy what we see.
<> VERY VERY GOOD !!!
80
Butterfly kisses
Like a spring shower on flowers - 8
Bees become jealous |
<> Butterfly kisses
Like spring showers on flowers
Bees become jealous
<> I will show you how I composed a bilingual duet
on the same  later ..
..
|
| Lake ?2007-08-30 10:15:28?? Re: Haiku (71-80) | |
又来上课。
| kokho 写到: |
| Lake 写到: |
71
Circles on the pond
Stir ripples of memory
Rainbows in water
《》rainbow is swimming ...
好，动感出来了。 曾把 swim 用在别处，这里就没想到了。
73
Purpose without art -
Petals open one by one
Art found in purpose
<> Arts flourish in life
Arts flourish in life 确实是这样。而这首主要是在玩儿 wordplay - purpose, art 也没在意是否 make sense, 写出来后，读读，还有点儿意思。
74
The days never end
So we can make our ends meet
Seasonal cycle
<> Only dream cycles
想，一天到晚忙忙碌碌，日复一日，年复一年，不就是为了
make your ends meet 吗？
75
Lords of Illusion
failed to illude a young mind -
"The King is unclothed!"
illude ? allude ? too old a story..
Yes, the "King" is an old story, but "Lords of Illusion" is not - combine these two together.
'illude', did I coin it? True, I wanted to find a verb to the noun 'Illusion", so I wrote it down first and then went to the internet to check to see if it is legitimate. Ha, here is the definition :
v. t.
To play upon by artifice; to deceive; to mock; to excite and disappoint the hopes of.
It is also in your favorit dictionary.com
78
Not in this instance -
Harder you work, better results. - 8
It needs natural gifts
<> don't you dare complain...
i didn't care for the rest (多义)
one enlightenment !
yeah, eight syllables...
多义: 我不管其他人怎么想；我不管结果如何；其他我一概不在乎，只在意 enlightenment 。。。？
79
Pie-crust promises-
Like "draw water with baskets"
We buy what we see.
<> VERY VERY GOOD !!!
One out of ten. Thanks!
80
Butterfly kisses
Like a spring shower on flowers - 8
Bees become jealous |
<> Butterfly kisses
Like spring showers on flowers - 7
Bees become jealous
I have to be carefull with syllables.
<> I will show you how I composed a bilingual duet
on the same later ..
.. |
Looking forward to your duet!
谢谢 Kokho 坦诚交流，热情指导。在不断学习中。
|
| kokho ?2007-08-30 22:48:55?? | |
..
don't you dare complain...
i didn't care for the rest (多义)
one enlightenment !
<> you missed this one - it is 5-7-5 too )
.
|
| kokho ?2007-08-30 22:51:03?? | |
Please note that, those are not comments
they are the replacement - mostly for the last phrase
．．
|
| Lake ?2007-08-31 03:45:12?? | |
| kokho 写到: |
..
don't you dare complain...
i didn't care for the rest (多义)
one enlightenment !
<> you missed this one - it is 5-7-5 too )
. |
i think i missed your 多义, please advise.
i know it is 5-7-5, i was talking about my 5-8-5. i must admit sometimes, i don't care too much about syllables.
Wait a minute, your Haiku says it well:
don't you dare complain...
i didn't care for the rest
one enlightenment !
another note:
i didn't care for the rest (6, some phonologists would argue; unless it is 'i did not care for the rest'.)
|
| Lake ?2007-08-31 03:58:26?? | |
| kokho 写到: |
Please note that, I what place there are not comments
they are the replacement - mostly for the last phrase
．． |
i Did get this part:
| 引用: |
| they are the replacement - mostly for the last phrase |
but Missed this:
| 引用: |
| I what place there are not comments |
|
| 博弈 ?2007-08-31 06:28:27?? | |
哇, 都八十了,朝诗夕拾亱为襌,神来一百禅
期待, 鼓励!
见如此用功, 为二位点烛温酒, 幸就烛泪醉.
|
| Lake ?2007-08-31 12:40:54?? | |
| 博弈 写到: |
哇, 都八十了,朝诗夕拾亱为襌,神来一百禅
期待, 鼓励!
见如此用功, 为二位点烛温酒, 幸就烛泪醉. |
I know Haiku to you is like 朗诵诗 to Kokho, not your taste...
So I feel honored to see your 期待, 鼓励! (希望这里没多义。）
其它那两句嘛 也打油一个
哈，朝湿柴，细炊烟，夜来孤影衣单，何来一百禅鞭？
俺烟酒不沾，睡眼强睁，泪腺干，哈欠响连天…
|
| 博弈 ?2007-08-31 21:05:34?? | |
| Lake 写到: |
I know Haiku to you is like 朗诵诗 to Kokho, not your taste...
|
I like to read though I can't write them well.
I did not want to write it simply because it is from Japan.
Pretty stupid, ain't I?
I admit it is a school of poetry. I admire more originality than
copying, in any creation.
Can my two lines be re-orgniazed to be "諧俳", just kidding
哇--都八十了
朝诗夕拾亱为襌
神来一百禅
见如此用功
为二位点烛温酒
幸就烛泪醉
|
| 1[2] 前页 | | English Poetry | | 开心一笑 | | 网友论坛 | | 驻站作家 | | 奥运之光 | | 移民心语 | | 现代诗歌讲习交流班 | | Fiction and Short Stories | | Prose and Essay | | 北美之音 Voice of North America | | Chinese Poetry |
|
