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赠表弟晓勋南下归九江

赠表弟晓勋南下归九江

凤舞南飞落九天,
行人车马卢沟前。
遥途寻觅来时路,
满载忧心念故园。

2007-04-26 23:26:28
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kokho ?2007-04-29 10:58:37?? Reply with quote


拜读 问好 

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晓松 ?2007-04-29 15:10:40?? Re: 赠表弟晓勋北下归九江 Reply with quote


郭思远 wrote:
赠表弟晓勋北下归九江

凤舞南飞落九天,
行人车马卢沟前。
遥途寻觅来时路,
满载忧心念故园。


问好朋友!
诗不错,方位有点疑问。“北下归九江”应是从南向北至九江,而诗中又“凤舞南飞”,且“卢沟(桥)”也在九江北面,故搞不清究竟是向北还是向南?

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郭思远 ?2007-04-29 23:41:06?? Re: 赠表弟晓勋北下归九江 Reply with quote


晓松 wrote:
郭思远 wrote:
赠表弟晓勋北下归九江

凤舞南飞落九天,
行人车马卢沟前。
遥途寻觅来时路,
满载忧心念故园。


问好朋友!
诗不错,方位有点疑问。“北下归九江”应是从南向北至九江,而诗中又“凤舞南飞”,且“卢沟(桥)”也在九江北面,故搞不清究竟是向北还是向南?


谢晓松,应该是南下归九江
由北往南 由北京到九江

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王君明 ?2007-05-01 06:23:30?? Reply with quote


拜读问好!

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