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???the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

胡礼忠2010-11-15 05:21:45

拜访老师、颂冬祺！

Lake2010-01-16 09:05:12

Thank you.

我家三儿2010-01-07 05:21:39

我叫太阳每天把幸福的阳光洒在你身上，我叫月亮每天给你一个甜美的梦境，祝愿你事事如意！ 

Lake2008-11-04 11:04:13

Thanks.

hepingdao2008-11-04 10:52:29

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西方文学　Western Literature

Autumn Road

The undulating road
leads to an unseen distance.
Showers of tree leaves
spin pirouettes on it,
until a car drives past.
The technicolor leaves,
the sky and earth converge
until a car drives into it.

2011-12-02 13:21:59

William Zhou周道模 ?2011-12-03 16:16:42??

eyesight and mind follow the driving

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非马 ?2011-12-04 07:26:18??

Hi Lake, how does it sound if you change the "until" in the last line to "when" or "as" and leave out lines 3 to 5. Have a happy holiday season!

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Lake ?2011-12-04 09:01:04??

Thanks William for your take.

Best,

Lake

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Lake ?2011-12-04 09:12:24??

非马寫到:

Hi Lake, how does it sound if you change the "until" in the last line to "when" or "as" and leave out lines 3 to 5. Have a happy holiday season!

Thanks Mr Fei Ma for your suggestion. Do you mean this,

The undulating road
leads to an unseen distance.
The technicolor leaves,
the sky and earth converge
as a car drives into it.

A minimal?

Happy holiday season to you, too.

Lake

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非马 ?2011-12-04 14:21:16??

Lake 寫到:

非马寫到:

Hi Lake, how does it sound if you change the "until" in the last line to "when" or "as" and leave out lines 3 to 5. Have a happy holiday season!