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Senryu - Scavengers (2)

1.
cries out - the chicken
on the dining table
scavengers circling


2.
cattle
plow the fields
then your stomach

2011-09-07 03:09:26
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Lake ?2011-09-09 12:21:37?? Reply with quote


No1, the chicken eats up all the leftover on the table?

No2, though cows work hard in the field, inevitably, they will be eaten by the human in the end?
"plow your stomach", haha. But 牛肚还暖胃呢。

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SLIU ?2011-09-10 03:45:44?? Reply with quote


thanks Lake!

No1 is based on a girl's dream or nightmare: a fully-roasted chicken on a dinning table suddenly cries out its final plea to a few humans around the table: "please don't bury me in your stomach". but the voice is drowned out by roars of sarcastic laughter.

No2, what if humans were in cattle's position...

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Lake ?2011-09-13 16:59:57?? Reply with quote


Ah, metaphorically speaking.

Perhaps, in such a short poem, the meanings in number 1 is hard to get across.

Thanks for your explanation.

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SLIU ?2011-09-14 18:26:00?? Reply with quote


You are right, but it's fun to see readers' different understandings. Smile

Thanks, Lake.

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