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张南城2009-08-18 04:26:57

问候先生。

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五绝 和白云闲人《人生几何》(古韵英译)

五绝 和白云闲人《人生几何》(古韵英译)

文/庆宏

人生有几何?岁月如穿梭。
剑赋青春志,笔吟瀚海歌。

After <Life in the World>

By Qinghong

How long is life in this world?
And the time flies like a shuttle;
Using a sharp sword,
You can realize your dream of young age;
And using a sharp pen,
You can surf on the knowledge ocean like Google!
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After <Life in the World>

By Qinghong

How long is life in this world?
And the time flies like a shuttle;
Your sharp sword,
Can draw a beautiful painting of young age dream;
Your sharp pen,
Can sing a wonderful song of knowledge ocean.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

白云闲人原玉:

人 生 几 何
< 调寄喜迁莺 >

闻莺唱,
展霞光,
酣睡春宵香.
梦中吟得一篇章,
醒后笑情长!

红日朗,
心花放,
北美楓园游荡.
临屏与友和高歌,
人生得几何!

2010-03-25 16:22:02
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nightingale2 ?2010-03-26 03:05:07?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


喜欢最后一句的翻译,新颖有趣 Very Happy
新春愉快!万事如意!

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     nightingale2běiměifēngwénjí
qinghongh ?2010-03-26 05:27:30?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


nightingale2 xièdào:
喜欢最后一句的翻译,新颖有趣 Very Happy
新春愉快!万事如意!


谢谢诗友雅赏及问候!也问诗友好。新增译文如上,请指正。

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     qinghonghběiměifēngwénjí
白水 ?2010-03-26 06:33:26?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


Hi, Qingh
A nice poem.


Suggestion:

And the time flies very fast like a shuttle;

Change to

And the time flies like a shuttle;

Question Razz

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     白水běiměifēngwénjí
Lake ?2010-03-26 08:01:02?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


Just a quick note:

1. I agree with moonlight about removing "very fast", because "flies like a shuttle" implies the meaning of speed.

2. On the whole it reads well, but a bit of paraphrasing rather than translating.
e.g. the first line in Chinese is a question, the English version is a statement.

I'm not good at translation, but just want to tell how I feel.

Thanks for sharing.

Lake

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     Lakeběiměifēngwénjí
qinghongh ?2010-03-26 08:32:33?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


谢谢白水及Lake的建议,修改如上。

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     qinghonghběiměifēngwénjí
SLIU ?2010-04-02 00:15:59?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


nice little poem...

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     SLIUběiměifēngwénjí
qinghongh ?2010-04-02 05:32:10?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


sliu6 xièdào:
nice little poem...


Thanks for your appreciation!

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     qinghonghběiměifēngwénjí
王国栋 ?2010-07-12 05:43:40?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


静心学习,体会老师翻译的五绝,收获很多。

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     王国栋běiměifēngwénjí
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