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 Under the Ruins
Under the Ruins
Life waits inside us for a spark to be struck.
Life is a new bud atop an old branch.
Life is ceaseless as waves chase seabirds.
Life is that sleeping, plump infant
trapped in the debris from an 8.0-magnitude
earthquake. He sucks in milk and blood
from his mother’s nipples, breathing
in a narrow space, arched by flesh and bones.
It is May, a time of May flowers and Mother’s day.
In the rocking arms of a rescuer, he stares, smiles
around, trying to make out who these strangers are.
Life shines in his curious eyes.
(Changed L1 and L3 from "Life waits inside us like a spark struck from flint." and "Life is ceaseless as streams running towards the sea.")
2009-05-29 05:17:38 |
| kino ?2009-05-30 17:03:19?? |  |
we should learn to be strong although life is but suffering (quoting the latin motto "Vita humana est supplicium").
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| Lake ?2009-06-01 16:46:18?? | |
Life is beautiful, unless one's life is hell.
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| justjust ?2009-06-03 20:14:21?? | |
very good poem. the first line kind of eludes me. can a spark struck from flint wait?
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| Lake ?2009-06-11 05:46:35?? | |
Thank you justjust for your question.
I have it revised. See how it sounds now.
Thanks.
Lake
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| 宁家珍 ?2009-06-11 20:07:05?? | |
It's a very good poem and I like reading it . I have to learn from you .
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| justjust ?2009-07-08 14:29:32?? | |
| Lake 写到: |
Life waits inside us for a spark to be struck.
Life is a new bud atop an old branch.
Life is ceaseless as waves chase seabirds.
Life is that sleeping, plump infant
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rhetorically i prefer something like this (though probably not semantically sound) :
life is a bright spark in a dark night
life is a new bud atop an old branch
life is a ceaseless wave in the boundless sea
life is that sleeping, plump infant
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| Lake ?2009-07-17 04:29:50?? | |
Thanks, just, for coming back to it. I see your point, rhetorically. I was thinking to do it a bit differently, with some minor variations.
Thanks again.
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