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?????2009-05-05

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东方朔南2010-12-24 19:57:04

圣诞快乐!

张南城2009-08-04 04:39:26

看望朋友。问一声夏日好。

sfiawong2009-05-05 21:32:06

從沒有想到這裏是一個安樂窩,原來這裡早安排了如斯美好的詩歌土地.總算沒有錯入不毛之地.原來是土地肥沃的國度.我會多些入來深望各位前輩....日後好相見呀!

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A Full Moon Night.

A Full Moon Night.

Watching the moon of a pale white lantern
as I thought my mom was in the moon.
Dreaming myself riding a space-ship to my home town,
As I passed through the oceans and mountains.
Why I see my father is thinking deeply?
My daughter’s children are smiling with happiness?
Immediately I felt myself with a line of grand-children
Recalled my memory for my children playing fire works,
We entered the Victoria Garden in the Moon Festival.
Are you still sleeping in your dream?
You should believe I am always staying by your side.

2009-05-25 23:56:54
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William Zhou周道模 ?2009-07-03 20:12:25?? 引用并回复


Maybe the word "as" on the second line and on the forth line are not needed.

Can we say "why I see" ?

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sfiawong ?2009-07-05 20:31:14?? 引用并回复


William Zhou周道模 写到:
Maybe the word "as" on the second line and on the forth line are not needed.
...

如你說的..應是可以.
謝,謝你的提議!

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