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秋游---巫山一段云

. . .秋游. . .
[巫山一段云]

盘曲疑无路,
腾云上碧穹.
泉轻吻石响叮咚,
霜重染丹枫.

两岫捧明镜,
孤桥抛落虹.
飘然脱俗似顽童,
随鸟任西东.

( 盘曲山径,幽深疑无路,浮云缥缈,攀登其中,尤如腾云直上碧空.泉水抚吻着岸边青石,轻轻地流淌,奏出叮咚欢快乐章.秋霜染红了丹枫.一泓碧绿湖水,似在两岫中捧着一方明镜,一条拱桥若落虹.身处尤感,飘然脱俗,心性似顽童,追逐着婉啭啼鸟,一任西东! )

2008-10-06 11:08:26
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黄洋界 ?2008-10-06 16:27:15?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


菩提秋游,有声有色.

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     黄洋界běiměifēngwénjí
菩提子 ?2008-10-07 15:19:51?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


谢黄兄鼓励!

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     菩提子běiměifēngwénjí
野航 ?2008-10-07 16:16:09?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


写景如画

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     野航běiměifēngwénjí
菩提子 ?2008-10-08 05:52:23?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


请野航君多指导!

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     菩提子běiměifēngwénjí
暗香如沁 ?2008-10-08 21:06:30?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


好兴致.灵活自如。

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     暗香如沁běiměifēngwénjí
菩提子 ?2008-10-09 12:44:01?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


谢暗香如沁鼓励!

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     菩提子běiměifēngwénjí
冰清 ?2008-10-09 13:19:48?? yǐnyòngbìnghuífù


炼字造境都好!

"泉轻吻石响叮咚". 我听到了"吻"的声音.

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yuèlǎnchéngyuánzīliào     冰清běiměifēngwénjí