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 Drive (song lyrics)
今天看见Lake诗友贴出了歌词贴，感觉深有共鸣，我自己也非常热衷英文歌词创作。只是一向认为没有适合的地方可以拿出来与大家分享。因此今天将一首rap风格的原创歌曲的歌曲贴出来，希望能找到很多有相同爱好的人共同探讨。。。
Drive
(Man sings :) When smoke spiraled up from her cigarette and made her cry,
When untamed mountain wind with bitter dews her hair dyed.
When bubbles of darkness in her veins began to rise,
When roofs left behind shone like glaciers in the moonlight.
(Chorus :) Having nothing more than a vagabond but a shabby cross-country car,
This rebel of destiny bid farewell to her torn-down life.
She now realized there’s no shelter from downpours or lies,
Goodbye ruins of memory yes I’m unwavering on this desperate drive.
(Man sings:)Girl, have sorrows and pains made you insane,
Why have I seen wild flames flooding up your eyes?
Clenching the steering wheel, pressing to the floor,
In front of you is desolateness trenching for miles and miles.
(Rap :)It was April, when magnolia flowers, peach and cherry blossoms appeared
Around little ponds, in little towns,
Where young girls in garish dresses were chasing dragonflies.
They didn't know happiness is shallow, they didn't care the ponds would one day dry,
They only enjoyed what they call ironically earthly delights.
They say: who bothers! Both saints and rogues are born to die.
(Man sings)Along the way she thought it over why,
Why we repeatedly surrender, indulge in numbness, when we can just say no and fight.
(Chorus :) All we need is maybe a little sensitivity, a little criticism,
A drop of red blood and a drop of bile.
But all we did is crouching in the sofa, watching soap operas, chewing junk foods,
Persuading ourselves that everything is going on right.
(Rap :) Ok. Call me a bigot, or whatever you like,
But aren't you really one of those slaves, to somebody, something, some principles or some elapsed time?
(Man sings :) There might be some unique terminal for her,
Beyond the network of longitudes and latitudes.
Exposed to wax and wane,
Maybe she had got a panorama of life on her mind.
2007-08-09 16:48:32 |
| Lake ?2007-08-10 13:11:50?? |  |
yinxiaoyuan 是位多手作家呢。我也是写着玩儿。
节奏上，我更喜欢第一节。
不知道Chorus 是否重复好些，特别是能把 title 加进去更有力量些？
总的感觉 歌词内的 message 多了些。
我不懂Rap.
你这首比我调侃的那首难度大，学习了。
我是外行，净瞎说。
欢迎你多评多发表。
Cheers,
Lake
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| 戴玨 ?2007-08-11 03:05:47?? | |
這個對於歌詞來說，文字太文雅了點。
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| yinxiaoyuan ?2007-08-12 21:18:50?? | |
我写歌词时间也不长，比较外行。纯粹娱乐而已。
今后写歌词会综合 考虑Lake和戴玨两位老师的意见。
希望和诸位今后多交流，多分享，多建议。。。
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| kokho ?2007-08-13 01:36:53?? | |
应该鼓励 ：）
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