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????? ?????Lake's blog 查找Lake發錶的所有帖子 ???the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins 胡礼忠2010-11-15 05:21:45拜访老师、颂冬祺！ Lake2010-01-16 09:05:12Thank you. 我家三儿2010-01-07 05:21:39我叫太阳每天把幸福的阳光洒在你身上，我叫月亮每天给你一个甜美的梦境，祝愿你事事如意！ Lake2008-11-04 11:04:13Thanks. hepingdao2008-11-04 10:52:29congratulations!
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 Angry Summer
Angry Summer
Don’t be rhetorical, my dear, don’t be rhetorical
when you decide to leave but say it's fate I suppose.
Don’t roll ephemeral ever forever off your tongue
for who'd tune an ear to a solemnly flippant oath.
Don’t hide behind an email with heart wrenching
words like a woman wearing a veil wets her handkerchief.
It’s time when water subsides, rocks emerge
I’ll laugh off this angry summer with a joyous grief.
The moon's never been this huge this round this orange
as I drive up the top of the hillside, seeing her full visage.
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| justjust123 ?2010-06-03 21:05:13?? |  |
on the top of a hill, you gaze upon the moon, bright and yet silent. then you look down and see another moon in water. suddenly fish leap everywhere . o, there are more fish in the sea.
the line 'It’s the time when...' does not sound right, it seems
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| Lake ?2010-06-05 07:11:56?? | |
Thanks Just for the read. I thought it'd sink to the bottom of the page without any comments.
Can you elaborate on why the line doesn't sound right?
Thanks.
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| justjust123 ?2010-06-05 10:13:03?? | |
When I was reading the line, I thought you meant : It’s time for water to subside and rocks to emerge.
If 'when' has to be used, this to me sounds a little more natural though I prefer the one above:
Now is the time when water subsides and rocks emerge.
Somehow, I do not feel 'it' and 'when' match here. Of course, I may be wrong.
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| Lake ?2010-06-08 14:51:00?? | |
Now I see. I guess there's some difference between the two, is there?
Anyway, this is a tired expression. I don't quite like it.
Thanks for the explanation.
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