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[原创]浣溪沙.公园拾趣

浣溪沙.公园拾趣
梦飞翁2007.4

无赖小儿踩滑鞋,
三摇两步把跤跌,
又呼奶奶又呼爷。

老汉抱孙揉泡慢,
婆婆埋怨不停歇:
你出主意可真邪!
(新韵)


2007-05-03 06:31:05
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暗香如沁 ?2007-05-03 07:28:32?? Reply with quote


哈。生动有趣。

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晓松 ?2007-05-03 20:45:09?? Reply with quote


婆婆埋怨不停歇:
你出主意可真邪!

口语入诗,妙极,欣赏!

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梦飞翁 ?2007-05-04 02:52:59?? Reply with quote


多谢暗香、晓松二友清赏!望多多教我!

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