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???the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

胡礼忠2010-11-15 05:21:45

拜访老师、颂冬祺！

Lake2010-01-16 09:05:12

Thank you.

我家三儿2010-01-07 05:21:39

我叫太阳每天把幸福的阳光洒在你身上，我叫月亮每天给你一个甜美的梦境，祝愿你事事如意！ 

Lake2008-11-04 11:04:13

Thanks.

hepingdao2008-11-04 10:52:29

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天籁 Sounds of Nature

请欣赏宗次郎（Sojiro）的陶笛《故乡的原风景》





天籁

远山浮天外
鹭鸶徘徊一鉴开
陶笛奏万籁


Sounds of Nature

Mountains float afar
Egrets hover, mirror pond
Ocarina sings



春天话语

谁踢落雪袄
冰凌坠滴声声娇
听嫩绿浅笑


Whisper of Spring

Who kicks off soft snow
Drips, drops, sound of icicles
Naked green giggles

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kokho ?2007-04-26 20:46:57?? Reply with quote


Got your music to the player



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kokho ?2007-04-26 20:49:49?? Reply with quote


陶笛奏万籁 --> 奏 > 咛　？？

Second Haiku is fantastic ...



Cool Laughing

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Lake ?2007-04-27 06:05:41?? Reply with quote


kokho wrote:
陶笛奏万籁 --> 奏 > 咛　？？

Second Haiku is fantastic ...



Cool Laughing


Thanks for the music, Kokho.

“奏”，you are spot on. Very Happy
我一直也在琢磨这个字，觉得生硬了些，一时又找不到合适的。想到“鸣”，感觉也不好。
“咛”，有“一再嘱咐“的意思。还有其他的词语供选择吗？网上哪里有汉语同义词，反义词的字典？能否推荐一两个？

很高兴你喜欢第二首，能不能讲讲凡泰斯替刻在哪里？ Laughing
因为读者对这首有不同的反响，有的说好，有的说文体不一致（写的时候从未考虑文体），如所评（评的是中文版）：

第一句：白话体
第二句：文言体
第三句：白话+文言体
文体要一致。

你的看法？

Many thanks!

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kokho ?2007-04-29 09:49:44?? Reply with quote


文体要一致。

<> I think is not necessary... some people are difficult by nature Wink)

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The second one is fantastic because it is spontaneous;
Also it has sound, scene, animation and optimism in the ending !

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Lake ?2007-04-29 12:06:02?? Reply with quote


kokho wrote:
文体要一致。

<> I think is not necessary... some people are difficult by nature Wink)

..

The second one is fantastic because it is spontaneous;
Also it has sound, scene, animation and optimism in the ending !

..


谢谢 Kokho 的评读！是看了这个舞蹈后写的。



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kokho ?2007-05-01 19:54:13?? Reply with quote


Very nice photo

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钓月 ?2008-04-17 16:28:27?? Reply with quote


品读.两首小诗均漂亮!

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