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五律 . 咏荷(六)

五律 . 咏荷(六)

司马从戎


玉立江湖上,亭亭天水间。
炎凉何足道,风雨只等闲。
长历无由寂,曾经无比艰。
平生只为洁,碧色是容颜。

2014-04-16 23:27:40
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黄洋界 ?2014-04-18 11:55:37?? Reply with quote


“碧色是容颜”句商榷一下,杨万里的“接天莲叶无穷碧,映日荷花别样红",写接天莲叶之碧,原在衬托映日荷花之红,“红”才是荷
的真容,说“碧色是容颜”就不准确了(荷花以红荷为主,绿荷不多见)。供参考。

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司马从戎 ?2014-04-20 22:55:55?? Reply with quote


黄洋界 wrote:
“碧色是容颜”句商榷一下,杨万里的“接天莲叶无穷碧,映日荷花别样红",写接天莲叶之碧,原在衬托映日荷花之红,“红”才是荷
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谢谢指正!

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冰清 ?2014-04-26 15:59:07?? Reply with quote


炎凉何足道,风雨只等闲。——好句。襟怀之咏!

欢迎新朋友!

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司马从戎 ?2014-05-06 17:19:13?? Reply with quote


冰清 wrote:
炎凉何足道,风雨只等闲。——好句。襟怀之咏!

欢迎新朋友!


多谢先生鼓励!

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冷雨 ?2014-05-07 04:11:55?? Reply with quote


问好诗友!

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