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 September (Haiku)
balancing
on a tree stump
one-legged crane
Twin Towers
the smoking of
wildfires
wondering
about the moon
I pack up my mind
2011-09-14 14:59:34 |
| SLIU ?2011-09-14 18:34:14?? |  |
silver light
streaming out
I unpack my mind
Twin Towers
the smoking of
cigars
not sure of the first one ^_^
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| Lake ?2011-09-15 08:17:45?? | |
Nice rewrite, I like how yours is in contrast with mine - pack, unpack.
The second one, it is meant much more than the smoke of cigars. 
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| Lake ?2011-09-15 15:26:46?? | |
| sliu6 wrote: |
| not sure of the first one ^_^ ... |
What are you not sure of, the meaning of my first one or how to rewrite something like that?
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| SLIU ?2011-09-15 22:15:17?? | |
I like the contrast too..
1st one, is it based on something happened in september?
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| Lake ?2011-09-16 08:01:00?? | |
These are all written in this September either by observation or feeling...since usually there is no title for haiku, I just add September there for this group.
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| SLIU ?2011-09-16 21:39:01?? | |
Thanks for your explanation. A nice group...
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