|
|
|
| 现代诗歌 | | 落尘诗社 | | 西方文学 Western Literature |
 
|
 成年
成年
at the DMV's you stand in line
waiting to take the 1st exam.
to get a driver license
behind the desk a black woman
she asks for your birth certificate
I see conduits on the walls and ceilings
I see coffees, creams and sugars
raise thumbs, and fingerprints
being scanned into the database
forget your teddies, you pass the test
on the way home, all cars
all highways and streets
you have conquered your 1st bear
now let's bring it back to our cave
and celebrate with beers
(well done, my son)
2011-08-19 16:00:49 |
| Lake ?2011-09-06 18:18:24?? |  |
Yes, well done for getting the driver's license, but no beer till 21.
|
| 戴玨 ?2011-09-07 20:24:12?? | |
Sugarcane or sugar candy? I thought only rural people nowadays chewed sugarcane, whereas city slickers usually drink sugarcane juice.
|
| 博弈 ?2011-09-07 21:53:06?? | |
| 戴玨 wrote: |
| Sugarcane or sugar candy? I thought only rural people nowadays chewed sugarcane, whereas city slickers usually drink sugarcane juice. |
thanks, I had hesitation on that line when first put it.
I have changed it to
"I see coffees, creams and sugars"
these are meant to be connotative: different peoples/races;
if not, they are just coffees in the office.
we don't have rituals like tribal people for a boy turning into a man,
in present days, driver license or beer on the 1st day as an adult
almost become the ritual.
that's how they tap into the society as implied in this poem
with words like "conduits", "highways and streets"
that were long established before them.
Thanks.
|
| 评论鉴赏 Reviews | | 名家综述 Expert Review | | Chinese Poetry | | 网友论坛 | | 古韵新音 | | 散文诗 Poetry in Prose | | 散文游记 | | 影视频道 | | 宾至如归 | | 美哉贴图 | | 小说故事 | | Reviews, Critics and Criticism | | English Poetry | | 海外新闻 Oversea News | | 博弈 | | 洛夫專欄 Lo Fu's Poetry Column | | 开心一笑 |
|
