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六窍灵通金蘸墨, 挥毫作赋数他牛;
一年只凑诗半句, 吟罢两行清泪流.

2009-12-27 23:25:58
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李盈枝 ?2009-12-28 00:16:41?? Reply with quote


君遥 wrote:
六窍灵通金蘸墨, 挥毫作赋数他牛;
一年只凑诗半句, 吟罢两行清泪流.
还是“诗三句”好,说明是一首五绝或七绝差一句。且取消了拗句。

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红叶笑西风 ?2009-12-28 03:51:55?? Reply with quote


李盈枝 wrote:
君遥 wrote:
六窍灵通金蘸墨, 挥毫作赋数他牛;
一年只凑诗半句, 吟罢两行清泪流.
还是“诗三句”好,说明是一首五绝或七绝差一句。且取消了拗句。

我来个正确的误导,诗千句比较好,流泪么,就让他流得更多,万行.

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君遥 ?2009-12-28 08:35:00?? Reply with quote


"诗半句, 吟罢泪流"那才牛呀!
诗3句, 吟罢泪流很平常也

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qinghongh ?2009-12-28 08:38:06?? Reply with quote


半字仄声出律。

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君遥 ?2009-12-28 11:16:24?? Reply with quote


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半字仄声出律。


(仄)平平仄平仄仄。这是一种特拗的句式,可以在下一句第五字用平声来相救。即(仄)仄(平)平平仄平。()里的,表示可平可仄

引自牛者说

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