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 Haiku - Early News (早知)
Haiku - Early News (早知)
Duck is first knowing water
The weather changed warm after the winter
Swim early with her children
鴨先知水性
冬天後的水轉暖
兒女早暢泳
(5+7+5,內附一季節性.)
2009-05-27 17:59:25 |
| Lake ?2009-05-29 05:14:18?? |  |
You got the 5/7/5 in Chinese, but a good haiku needs two contrast/comparison images to create that Aha moment, otherwise it is just a pretty scene.
Good effort.
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| sfiawong ?2009-05-29 08:58:26?? | |
| Lake wrote: |
You got the 5/7/5 in Chinese, but a good haiku needs two contrast/comparison images to create that Aha moment, otherwise it is just a pretty scene.
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Yes, you are right, I have changed it completely with Chinese and English in the right numbers of words.
Thank you !
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| sfiawong ?2009-05-29 09:28:26?? | |
Both in the Chinese and English must match in the same number of words. (Haiku poetry.)
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| Lake ?2009-05-29 09:44:39?? | |
English haiku is counted by syllables not by words as far as I know. And the modern English haiku has abandoned the 17-syllable rule, it concentrates on other things besides syllable count, and 8-12 syllables is usually preferred in English haiku.
Correct me if I'm wrong.
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