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7008262008-03-22 01:31:03

感念KOKHO，一切可好？！

120103199511022007-11-23 19:08:38

12010319951102来报道！

孤独牧牛2007-11-22 06:16:05

感谢ｋｏｋｈｏ

放飞心情LL2007-11-22 05:24:40

今天是感恩节！虽然我不信基督，但我认同感恩，真的感谢上苍让我们相识，但愿我们成为一生的好朋友！祝福你我，亲爱的朋友，愿一起度过这个快乐的节日.

勿妄言2007-05-02 10:11:29

英文啊?看不懂 Sad (
五一快乐! Smile )

半溪明月2007-05-01 08:36:25

问好KOKHO,五一快乐! Smile

宾至如归

English Poetry

现代诗歌

西方文学　Western Literature

Whole <> 全部 - Ms Slavick

。 Whole
<> Madeleine Marie Slavick

Cut some green out
for a little fresh shirt
or frilly kitchen curtains
and you’ve orphaned a shrub
Green lives the need to express
wraps hills with respect
makes grassland honest
seduces moss
affirms trees
and vines decide its maze

全部
翻译 <> 郑单衣

剪掉一些綠色
為一小件新襯衫
或帶花邊的廚房窗簾
你使一株灌木成了孤兒
綠色為表達意願而活著
充滿敬畏纏繞山丘
用誠實生出草地
誘導苔蘚
攀上樹梢
藤蔓們設計著自己的迷宮

A resident of Hong Kong for more than a decade, Madeleine Marie Slavick's work has been published and exhibited in Hong Kong, Japan, Singapore and the United States. She is a leading member of Outloud, Hong Kong's highly successful society of English-language poets, and her work is included in the Outloud anthology. In addition to Round, co-authored with Barbara Baker, she has co-authored two books on China: Children in China (also with Barbara Baker) and China, The Dragon Awakes.

2007-01-08 22:12:24

和平岛 ?2007-01-09 00:21:28??

英文的句子结构清晰,使理解比较容易

而中文，更灵活和多解性

。。。
綠色——
為表達意願而活著
。。。

如果这样排一下，就不会让读者误读
Very Happy

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Lake ?2007-01-22 21:57:03??

短小精悍，清新雅致。诗人以简洁生动的语言称颂绿，亦即大自然。
诗的前四行讲了绿如何变得残缺，后六行绿的完整。
人类难道不应该敬畏大自然，善待大自然吗？
人和自然是一个整体，Oneness, Wholeness.
诗将绿拟人化。几个动词的连用， lives, wraps, makes,seduces affirms,使得节奏感强，语气肯定 affirmative tone, 赋予绿人格特征。

译文也很精炼。其中

Quote:

剪掉一些綠色
為一小件新襯衫
或帶花邊的廚房窗簾

"為", 是不是“做”的意思？ “花邊”，“鑲褶边”？

现在明白了和平岛为何建议调整下列诗行

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