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【七律】 又重阳

斜风细雨又重阳,枯叶飘零落满塘。
寂寞楼高荷更瘦,痴心梦短菊还香。
停杯恰送西天雁,举首难逢北极光。
未有豪情今醉酒,愁来永夜怎回乡?

2008-10-09 20:34:30
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qinghongh ?2008-10-10 07:45:32?? Reply with quote


好诗。但“举首难逢北极光”中的“极”似乎出律了,请检查。极是平声,这里该用仄声。

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是有缘 ?2008-10-10 08:09:53?? Reply with quote


谢谢qinghongh兄评阅。“极”现代汉语读平声,但古诗里属于入声字。请参见:
http://www.xywq.com/xiyuan/files/f-5/rusheng-5.htm

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notcoffee ?2008-10-10 08:12:04?? Reply with quote


极依古韵是仄!

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菩提子 ?2008-10-10 09:21:07?? Reply with quote


"痴心梦短菊还香"好句!

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qinghongh ?2008-10-14 07:59:30?? Reply with quote


是有缘 wrote:
谢谢qinghongh兄评阅。“极”现代汉语读平声,但古诗里属于入声字。请参见:
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谢谢!

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