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七绝*风筝

七绝*风筝


竹骨轻柔纸扎身，细经装点更缤纷。
一时借得东风起，姿态飘飘便不群。
08/03/26

2008-03-26 15:11:43
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莹雪 ?2008-03-26 17:43:50?? Reply with quote


转，结二句有深意。

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黄洋界 ?2008-03-27 10:32:42?? Reply with quote


结句确有深意，“飘飘”二字可否换“翩翩”二字？

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田建勋 ?2008-03-29 06:55:47?? Reply with quote


谢谢两位老师的指点!

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