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| 詩盜喜裸評 ?2008-09-17 12:56:05?? 这不是沿着你的思路走么？ |  |
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一树迎风舞，新月上枝头。
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| 悠子 ?2008-09-17 13:06:42?? 我哪里有一树迎风舞，新月上枝头? | |
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一树迎风舞，新月上枝头。
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| 悠子 ?2008-09-17 13:08:00?? 喝酒了没? | |
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| 诗盗喜裸评 wrote: |
一树迎风舞，新月上枝头。
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| 詩盜喜裸評 ?2008-09-17 13:19:15?? 都用你的多不好意思～提供一些则个。 | |
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一树迎风舞，新月上枝头。
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| 詩盜喜裸評 ?2008-09-17 13:21:41?? 小店不让赊，没买成。 | |
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一树迎风舞，新月上枝头。
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| 悠子 ?2008-09-17 13:28:34?? 那也不能换色呀 | |
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一树迎风舞，新月上枝头。
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| 悠子 ?2008-09-17 13:31:38?? 小店早打烊了，看你正迷糊着呢 | |
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一树迎风舞，新月上枝头。
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| 悠子 ?2008-09-17 14:11:34?? 我不是会写不韵的诗吗~~~ | |
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| 韻S了，有些積重難返， 以後不寫這樣的詩了！！不對，你要學著轉韻，或是讓音韻協調。讓音韻從有形化為無形。 |
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| 詩盜喜裸評 ?2008-09-17 15:02:14?? 那就可以做到有韵似无韵，何必一定要一刀切。 | |
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| 韵S了，有些积重难返， 以后不写这样的诗了！！不对，你要学着转韵，或是让音韵协调。让音韵从有形化为无形。 |
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| 悠子 ?2008-09-17 15:18:28?? 不是说积重难返了吗？ 好像脱不出来似的，调调不一样~ 不过你不是要练习吗 | |
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| 韵S了，有些积重难返， 以后不写这样的诗了！！不对，你要学着转韵，或是让音韵协调。让音韵从有形化为无形。 |
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