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William Zhou周道模 ?2008-04-20 21:39:58?? Reply with quote


描景细,结构有变化,情寓景中,节奏欢快跳跃。

结尾点题有损艺术性。(教师的思维惯性----就这样教学生作文啊!我是教师体会深。)

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荷梦 ?2008-04-21 01:20:17?? Reply with quote


恩,你的建议很好!就去了!

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荷梦 ?2008-04-21 01:24:50?? Reply with quote


舒雨湖 wrote:
呵呵,景,到底是心境。我今年在这个地方,已经很熟悉了,少了一些触动。我以为,感动的心境,总是最值得珍惜的。问好楼主呵呵

对,景说到底就是心境!
回好!欢迎常交流!

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祖克慰 ?2008-04-23 03:54:50?? Reply with quote


一场春雨,感慨万千啊!美文!创作丰收。

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荷梦 ?2008-04-25 01:59:21?? Reply with quote


谢谢你的评阅与祝福!愿散文游记成为我们大家创作丰收的好平台!

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冰清 ?2008-04-25 02:57:17?? Reply with quote


生机勃勃, 好!

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溪语 ?2008-04-28 06:37:13?? Reply with quote


好雨

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荷梦 ?2008-04-29 00:58:53?? Reply with quote


谢谢冰清、溪语评阅!问好!

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一言 ?2008-04-29 04:10:57?? Reply with quote


嗯,路过

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荷梦 ?2008-05-01 22:06:32?? Reply with quote


一言好!

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