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湮雨朦朦 ?2009-08-27 00:08:24?? Reply with quote


白水 Moonlight wrote:
Very Happy Very Happy 临屏一游
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还是白大美女诗人主持公道,thanks.

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湮雨朦朦 ?2009-08-27 00:13:39?? Reply with quote


博弈 wrote:
白水言語來走棋
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一言惊了我湮雨
博弈留话有非意
白水挥动马和车
分不清是泪和雨 Surprised

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湮雨朦朦 ?2009-08-27 00:16:25?? Reply with quote


博弈 wrote:
湮雨朦朦 wrote:
博弈 wrote:
堆砌. 這樣的詩, 不寫也罷!


是吗?自作聪明.


太直了点,女孩子不好承受,你也真是的。
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哦,那就是说我的福气来了咯?我只欢迎真诚的朋友.

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湮雨朦朦 ?2009-08-27 00:18:01?? Reply with quote


nobody wrote:
从语言到内容,都透露出人生画卷徐徐初展的那种纯真,惊喜,期盼。令人羡慕 Very Happy


真诚的朋友,远握.

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博弈 ?2009-08-28 05:29:08?? Reply with quote


真诚地说两句:
1。得把语言象与意象的联系研究一下。
2。写新诗得把‘的’字(定语)写好了才算入了门。

其他的毛病在这两样弄清后,自己就看出来了。

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zmj166 ?2009-10-16 02:31:50?? Reply with quote


喜欢你的表达手法,喜欢你的诗!

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湮雨朦朦 ?2009-10-17 14:22:06?? Reply with quote


博弈 wrote:
真诚地说两句:
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谢谢.

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湮雨朦朦 ?2009-10-17 14:24:20?? Reply with quote


zmj166 wrote:
喜欢你的表达手法,喜欢你的诗!



Very Happy 朋友,你好.很高兴能阅读湮雨的诗歌,我要真诚地说一声谢谢.

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