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黄洋界 ?2008-05-18 07:58:19?? Reply with quote


秋叶“突”字改得好,形容出人们毫无思想准备而面临的大灾,更显灾情的惨烈,谢谢!

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秋叶 ?2008-05-18 13:24:05?? Reply with quote


巴山蜀水凄凉地
地动惊魂处处哀
众志成城人自救
齐心协力抗天灾

“地"也重了,改为“巴山蜀水凄凉境”如何,供参考。

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黄洋界 ?2008-05-18 13:30:40?? Reply with quote


好极了,真是旁观者清啊!谢谢!

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天浪 ?2008-07-10 00:24:10?? Reply with quote


蜀地惊心大震来
千家万户竟罹灾
苍天竟不垂青眼
令我生民尽举哀

竟罹灾,改为惨罹灾,不知如何?
悲剧之惨,不在现场,实难感知。
天浪问好黄老!

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黄洋界 ?2008-07-10 04:03:27?? Reply with quote


天浪言之在理,换"竟"为"惨",好.谢谢!

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