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五律 静思

给各位诗友问好,请指教!

五律 静思

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人生路坎坷,苦里觅甘甜。
年幼时时乐,求学夜夜寒。
北国雪漫舞,南海雨连绵。
烦恼随它去,冥冥自有缘!

2009-02-01 10:03:12
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白云闲人 ?2009-02-01 11:07:11?? Reply with quote


很好,在回首中静思,在静思里寻得乐观的人生观:"苦里觅甘甜'."烦恼随它去,溟溟自有缘"! 顺缘而就,随遇而安!

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qinghongh ?2009-02-01 12:05:16?? Reply with quote


lulu的诗进步很大!

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白水 ?2009-02-01 17:27:21?? Reply with quote


烦恼随它去,溟溟自有缘

好感觉

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王君明 ?2009-02-01 23:50:53?? Reply with quote


可感。拜望!

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lulu ?2009-02-02 03:49:46?? Reply with quote


白云闲人 wrote:
很好,在回首中静思,在静思里寻得乐观的人生观:"苦里觅甘甜'."烦恼随它去,溟溟自有缘"! 顺缘而就,随遇而安!
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谢白云老师赏读雅评!
是啊,lulu只略知新韵,不懂古韵,我想,用古韵作诗一定会很美,还请白云老师指教!

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lulu ?2009-02-02 03:51:28?? Reply with quote


qinghongh wrote:
lulu的诗进步很大!

谢庆宏老师表扬!学生会继续努力!

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lulu ?2009-02-02 03:54:36?? Reply with quote


白水 Moonlight wrote:
烦恼随它去,溟溟自有缘

好感觉

谢白水 Moonlight赏读,请多指教!

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lulu ?2009-02-02 03:57:08?? Reply with quote


王君明 wrote:
可感。拜望!

谢诗友赏读!请多指教!

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游向高原的鱼 ?2009-02-02 04:25:10?? lulu Reply with quote


lulu如果对古诗感兴趣,可以读一点古音韵知识,王力的古汉语里面有。这样写出的古体诗歌味道更浓。

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