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张南城2009-08-18 04:26:57

问候先生。

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七绝 和流年粉黛(二)

七绝 和流年粉黛(二)

柳拂水面似霞烟,春意熏人燕缠绵。
遥见岸边持帕女,依依相送凤楼前?

流年粉黛原玉:
风穿堂院淡炊烟,燕燕徘徊戏柳绵。
鹂语缓催罗帕女,相逢一笑凤楼前。



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白水 ?2008-12-04 18:28:01?? Reply with quote


唱和都很美.

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qinghongh ?2008-12-04 18:45:08?? Reply with quote


白水 Moonlight wrote:
唱和都很美.

谢白水兄!可惜美图我转不过来。

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白水 ?2008-12-04 19:00:28?? Reply with quote


为什么? 是不会上传吗?

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qinghongh ?2008-12-04 19:13:16?? Reply with quote


白水 Moonlight wrote:
为什么? 是不会上传吗?

我还真不会上传图片。有空请白水兄赐教!

Embarassed

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黄洋界 ?2008-12-05 02:16:42?? Reply with quote


与白水兄之评同感.

结句似不该用问号,从前后文看,是肯定的语气.请酌定.

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白云闲人 ?2008-12-05 07:11:08?? Reply with quote


情意缠绵!

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qinghongh ?2008-12-05 08:55:16?? Reply with quote


黄洋界 wrote:
与白水兄之评同感.

结句似不该用问号,从前后文看,是肯定的语气.请酌定.

谢黄老师赏评。这两首和诗是看图赋诗,所以不太肯定情节,故而用了问句。黄老师细心人。

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qinghongh ?2008-12-05 08:55:59?? Reply with quote


白云闲人 wrote:
情意缠绵!

谢白云赏读。

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qinghongh ?2008-12-06 19:08:47?? Reply with quote




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