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 发表于: 2010-06-16 08:25:05 发表主题: 不麻醉 |
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不麻醉
妳我
眼睛
凝接在這
傷疤
U and I/Eyes/Melt and freeze /At the scar
皮膚的
小陵
A mound /Above the skin
底下
葬藏著
多年前
的我的她
In it/Buried and treasured/my Her/in the past tense
她仍熟悉
每一通道
每一密室
Yet still Her/Travels every /Passage and cell
妳抬頭
像個醫生
來盜墓
U turn up/A ghoul pretends/To be a surgeon
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I'm not sure if I like the slashes in the English lines - the slashes read like a scansion of meters, or lines quoted in a prose , or an instruction of where or when the reader needs to stop. I know there's a reason of using slashes, but you know what I mean.
Cheers
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Don't know why there's a slash inserted before an apostrophe on the thread. Do others have the same issue? It's annoying.
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| 发表于: 2010-06-17 10:04:12 发表主题: |
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＂a slash inserted before an apostrophe on the thread＂
what do you mean?
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On my computer
"I'm not sure"
reads like
I/'m not sure
Is it just me? All it's, they're, I'm look like it/'s, they/'re, I/'m on the thread.
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I'm not sure if I like the slashes in the English lines - the slashes read like a scansion of meters, or lines quoted in a prose , or an instruction of where or when the reader needs to stop. I know there's a reason of using slashes, but you know what I mean.
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大概是＂凝接＂吧。
也作分行詩的分段功能，排列起來省點空間，一塊一塊的（Ｘ－Ｙ軸）。 
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On my computer
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it is you, just or not just, I do not know.
(這是中式英文)
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On my computer
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it is you, just or not just, I do not know.
(這是中式英文)
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me learning chinese style english
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