hepingdao
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 Posted: 2008-02-03 19:23:19 Post subject: Dream of a Bridge |
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Suppose you can reach another side of
a dream
by a rope
with one end attached to a rail
and another
swinging in the wind
You never meant to break
a promise
to your wife and daughter
you are the bread-maker
but barely made both ends meet
Suppose you have wings
the ground is becoming soft,
liquefied,
with ripples of blood
and the bridge is drifting
like a boat
without an anchor line
You tried to fly back
suppose the bank is not too far to reach
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戴玨
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| Posted: 2008-02-04 14:30:16 Post subject: |
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and another
swinging in the wind
You never meant to break
you are the bread-maker （bread-winner吧？）
but barely made (both) ends meet
You tried to fly back
but today is too far to reach
這兩句沒讀明白，已經在今天，怎麽too far to reach？
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| Posted: 2008-02-04 16:00:37 Post subject: |
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thanks
the last sentence is not too sure for me too:
The "You" committed suicide, so today this guy does not exist any more
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| Posted: 2008-02-05 11:33:57 Post subject: |
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Second 戴玨's first two points.
It seems like there is a hidden story in this poem.
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the ground is becoming soft,
liquefied,
with ripples of blood |
This sounds morbid, horrifying.
I found some spacing a bit distracting.
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Suppose you can reach another side of
a dream
You never meaned to break --sb meant
a promise
to your wife and daughter
you are the bread-maker
but barely made the ends meet
Suppose you have wings |
Don't understand why these lines are double spaced.
Just found out that I couldn't quote the entire message when clicking 'quote'.
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| Posted: 2008-02-16 11:11:49 Post subject: |
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| Lake wrote: |
Second 戴玨's first two points.
It seems like there is a hidden story in this poem.
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the ground is becoming soft,
liquefied,
with ripples of blood |
This sounds morbid, horrifying.
I found some spacing a bit distracting.
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Suppose you can reach another side of
a dream
You never meaned to break --sb meant
a promise
to your wife and daughter
you are the bread-maker
but barely made the ends meet
Suppose you have wings |
Don't understand why these lines are double spaced.
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here and there, I have been kept on changing codes, sometimes just introduced some errors
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| Posted: 2008-02-16 13:34:37 Post subject: |
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here and there, I have been kept on changing codes, sometimes just introduced some errors
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No wonder some fonts look slightly different now on my browser. 
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| Posted: 2008-02-16 21:50:11 Post subject: |
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| hepingdao wrote: |
here and there, I have been kept on changing codes, sometimes just introduced some errors
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No wonder some fonts look slightly different now on my browser. |
which you like better, the new ones or the old
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| Posted: 2008-02-16 22:14:25 Post subject: |
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| 戴玨 wrote: |
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here and there, I have been kept on changing codes, sometimes just introduced some errors
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No wonder some fonts look slightly different now on my browser. |
which you like better, the new ones or the old
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I prefer the old ones, the sizes fit better.
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| Posted: 2008-03-03 17:19:52 Post subject: |
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I read all of them by all of you and learned a lot
from all of you,thanks!
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