| 莹雪 进士出身
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2007-02-16 19:08:47    Post subject: [原创]五绝-除夕 |   |  
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				|   街巷红装透,欢歌伴曲幽。
 迎年书语秀,辞岁赋诗稠。
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		| 白水 大学士
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2007-02-18 19:41:58    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 书香飘逸的节日 |  | 
	
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		| 莹雪 进士出身
 
 
 Joined: 28 Sep 2006
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				|  Posted: 2007-02-18 21:58:10    Post subject: |   |  
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呵呵, 
	  | 白水 Moonlight wrote: |  
	  | 书香飘逸的节日 |  
   白水兄过年好,新春快乐、身体健康、时时顺心、万事如意、恭喜发财、抬头见喜!
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		| 司马策风 举人
 
  
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		| 莹雪 进士出身
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2007-02-19 22:56:34    Post subject: |   |  
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	  | 司马策风 wrote: |  
	  | 优美,对仗工整。 
 个见:后两句不用对仗,可能更为潇洒,流畅。
 
 春节好
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   司马兄过年好,新春快乐、身体健康、时时顺心、万事如意、恭喜发财、抬头见喜!
 我觉得对仗与流畅并不矛盾。
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