[汉英微型诗] 三片树叶

[William Zhou周道模]

三片树叶

黄叶说落叶：完了

青叶说黄叶：你也快了

说着，青叶开始发黄了


Three Leaves of the Tree

Yellow leaf tells the falling one, going down so low

Green leaf tells the yellow one, soon you will follow

While saying that, the green one is turning yellow
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[Lake]

Good one.

Two minor points:

Three Leaves of the Tree - Would "Three Leaves" be enough?

the green one is getting yellow - is "turning yellow" better?
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[William Zhou周道模]

THanks!

What's the diffrence between the grass leaf and the tree leaf?
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[Lake]

These are just my thoughts, they may not fit in your poem. So take it or leave it.

But I see you have changed your poem again.

When you read "falling leaves", would you think of grass leaves? I wouldn't.
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[William Zhou周道模]

the falling leaf from the tree
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[Lake]

See, that's what I meant.
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[jemmy]

love the poem,it's special
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[jemmy]

小哲理诗歌有时反而有点意思
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[William Zhou周道模]

谢 jemmy 的鼓励！
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