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内衣
赤裸的
最后一道防线
撤啦！
UNDERWEAR
last line of defense
against nakedness
RETREAT!
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things we wear under could say a lot about us.
when we take off those underwear, hopefully we see true 'skins' in naked eyes.
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Lake
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| Posted: 2008-08-06 20:44:52 Post subject: |
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又好像是在看一场 show. ？
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| Posted: 2008-12-05 05:01:03 Post subject: |
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 学习！问候您！
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William Zhou周道模
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| Posted: 2008-12-08 02:23:23 Post subject: |
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读非马老师的好诗，不由浮想连翩，草拟两句，以作雅和。请审定英语。
内衣underwear
周道模William Zhou
拉开春天的门帘Draw the curtains of Spring aside
听花开的声音……Listen to the flowers blooming
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非马
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| Posted: 2008-12-08 05:03:12 Post subject: |
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读非马老师的好诗，不由浮想连翩，草拟两句，以作雅和。请审定英语。
拉开春天的门帘Draw the curtains of Spring
听花开的声音……Listen to the sound of the unfolding flower
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道模好!
末句英文写成Listen to the sound of flowers unfolding
是否好些?
也问刘浪好.
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William Zhou周道模
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| Posted: 2008-12-08 13:09:19 Post subject: |
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谢非马老师指点！我想改成这样：Listen to the unfolding flowers可否？有“听”的动词，可略“声音”。
另告：尊文《在芝加哥义卖赈灾》近发表于《三星堆文学》，我即寄样刊，先告为谢。
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| Posted: 2008-12-08 18:34:10 Post subject: |
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谢非马老师指点！我想改成这样：Listen to the unfolding flowers可否？有“听”的动词，可略“声音”。
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SOUND字是没太大必要.
谢谢为我发表义卖消息.
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Lake
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| Posted: 2008-12-09 11:57:43 Post subject: |
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内衣underwear
拉开春天的门帘Draw the curtains of Spring
听花开的声音……Listen to the unfolding flowers |
William,
Sorry, I can't link underwear with curtains and flowers, except ... you know what I mean.
'draw the curtains' can mean both 'open' or 'close', depending on the context. I know you mean 'open', but 'underwear' may mislead to 'close'. It might just be me.
Cheers,
Lake
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William Zhou周道模
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| Posted: 2008-12-13 23:58:44 Post subject: |
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谢谢 Lake 的意见，确有“想得美、离题远”之嫌。
能否 draw the curtains of Spring open?
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