qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
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Posted: 2008-03-21 05:21:30 Post subject: 五绝 春日偶感(一) |
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五绝 春日偶感(一)
日暖冰消散,风和绿四方。
春光脚步近,荡漾在他乡。 |
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黄洋界 探花

Joined: 23 Mar 2007 Posts: 3301 Location: 多伦多,加拿大 黄洋界Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-21 11:04:37 Post subject: |
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春风得意,流连他乡。问好! _________________ ++++++++++++++
喜金石书画,友竹菊梅兰 |
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qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
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Posted: 2008-03-21 13:14:02 Post subject: |
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谢谢黄老师点评。问春安! |
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qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
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Posted: 2008-03-21 14:28:25 Post subject: |
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谢黄老师。发现“连”为平声,出律了。现改为“荡漾在他乡”。 |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-21 17:28:12 Post subject: |
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欣赏春意盎然! |
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qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
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Posted: 2008-03-21 19:22:49 Post subject: |
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谢莹雪MM赏评!问春天好! |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-21 19:28:46 Post subject: |
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qinghongh wrote: |
谢莹雪MM赏评!问春天好! |
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