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今天晚上可真冷

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nobody
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Posted: 2007-01-06 16:30:40 Post subject: 今天晚上可真冷

今天晚上可真冷 91,10 今天晚上可真冷孩子拧不动暖气阀水更冷，盘子趁机挣脱奔向瓷，并把碎声弄得很大爸爸去赌妈妈去跳舞孩子抱着绒线球缩在沙发里看电视别人的爸爸问孩子 ──宝贝，眼怎么肿了谁欺负你了快告诉爸爸可是这个孩子的爸爸从来不问他不用问因为那就是他干的节目全完了可怜的孩子睡着了紧紧抱着绒线球脸上还挂着泪珠起风了，风真大它侧着身从门缝里探进来它来推销寒冷可看到只有一个孩子脸上还挂着泪珠就悄悄退出去不忘把门带上

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Posted: 2007-01-06 19:27:11 Post subject:

可看到只有一个孩子脸上还挂着泪珠就悄悄退出去不忘把门带上感人肺腑 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫!

nobody
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Posted: 2007-01-06 19:34:36 Post subject:

谢谢。好懂吧。连您都看懂了。 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

和平岛
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Posted: 2007-01-06 19:37:30 Post subject:

能写得直白而又好的,是很不容易的 _________________ 写诗是为了写更好的诗

nobody
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Posted: 2007-01-06 19:53:16 Post subject:

你就给我灌迷汤，喝农药吧。人家别人都没吭声。不说我，就诗本身，能流传的都是能看懂的。也写过N年连自己都看不懂的诗。现在都当相声看了。如果现在还写的话，一定保证初小以上的都看得懂。 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2007-01-06 20:05:53 Post subject:

我不是瞎说你看看洛夫的诗歌,没有一首是难懂的, 却是好诗(他的诗歌是我喜欢的) 深入浅出能浅出, 才算真正高手:不怕别人看懂, 而能保持诗意浓厚的, 真不容易 _________________ 写诗是为了写更好的诗

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Posted: 2007-01-07 04:33:01 Post subject:

呵呵，我水平低不懂诗，但好歹总算读明白写的什么。只觉得要有一颗饱含着关爱的心才能写出这样的文字。没有一颗童心也是写不出最后一节的。

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Posted: 2007-01-09 13:01:38 Post subject:

问好　新朋友　给你　发了个欢迎贴　；） http://oson.ca/viewtopic.php?p=6685&sid=f002c84708ef937c51f59f1de4c4fa87#6685 ． _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

nobody
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Posted: 2007-01-09 13:11:39 Post subject:

thanks kokho, the pic is soooo nice, you're making a difference! but I have to confess that I received one already, just changed my id from simplysimple to nobody. that one was sent by hepingdao, can't even compare to yours! just came back from s'pore three weeks ago. very nice. just a bit hot for me... thanks, appreciate it. _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2007-01-09 13:38:53 Post subject:

nobody wrote:

thanks kokho, the pic is soooo nice, you're making a difference!
but I have to confess that I received one already, just changed my id from simplysimple to nobody. that one was sent by hepingdao, can't even compare to yours!
just came back from s'pore three weeks ago. very nice. just a bit hot for me...
thanks, appreciate it.

Aough -

I should have host you and bring you around town.

Next time do contact me.. HPD has all my info...

Cool

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月光情怀
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Posted: 2007-01-11 08:59:45 Post subject:

从这首诗里，我看到了多年前的那个我。和诗里的那个孩子差不多。时常沮丧在大人们的事里头。童年，始终有我的一些阴影。虽然他们后来还算有良心，看在我的面子上和好了。但是记忆中依然有非常深刻而疼痛的感觉传来。 _________________ 在心的残缺处去完整诗的美丽 QQ：33179345 msn:wuxizhuo123456@hotmail.com 个人主页：http://hi.baidu.com/xizhuo欢迎光临。

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Posted: 2007-01-11 11:20:23 Post subject:

月光情怀 wrote:

从这首诗里，我看到了多年前的那个我。和诗里的那个孩子差不多。时常沮丧在大人们的事里头。童年，始终有我的一些阴影。虽然他们后来还算有良心，看在我的面子上和好了。但是记忆中依然有非常深刻而疼痛的感觉传来。

谢谢真诚分享.过去的事无法改变,能做的就只有全心原谅和爱, 并感恩. 而这不仅是为别人,更多是为自己.

另外,若没有那一切,或许就没有今天的月光情怀吧. 有大智者,必从痛中开出花朵.
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Posted: 2007-01-18 11:21:03 Post subject:

再读月光说得好！ _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2007-01-19 07:50:07 Post subject:

起风了，风真大它侧着身从门缝里探进来它来推销寒冷可看到只有一个孩子脸上还挂着泪珠就悄悄退出去不忘把门带上诗人有一颗童心和爱心~

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Posted: 2007-01-20 01:20:34 Post subject:

谢谢半溪明月兄！没想到大家能这末又感触，深受鼓励。也一并谢过兄在俺其他帖子上的勉励！ _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2007-01-20 07:37:53 Post subject:

童心和爱心为诗心之土壤......

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Posted: 2007-01-21 03:32:08 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

童心和爱心为诗心之土壤......

谢白水，能欣赏童心和爱心的也必有童心和爱心。
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Posted: 2007-01-21 03:57:55 Post subject:

现在可是VANCOUVER三更, 有人真要为神仙不知何故, 这边网速慢到总掉线

nobody
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Posted: 2007-01-21 04:42:51 Post subject:

那toronto就六更了！搞电脑的三更前就歇的。。。也有。现在差不多是时候将息了。 good night! 咱这纯属于聊大天，岛主会生气地。那，那，就湿一下吧。假日的夜晚假日的夜晚多么寂寥多么寂寥！听我来唱首爱情小调爱情小调！从前有个美丽的姑娘美丽的姑娘牵着小鹿在森林里游荡森林里游荡忽然旁边跳出一只花豹一只花豹姑娘吓得撒腿就跑撒腿就跑姑娘跑得慢啦──啦──啦── 豹子跑得快啦──啦──啦── 豹子眼看要追上姑娘啦──啦──啦── 姑娘眼看就要遭殃啦──啦──啦── 这时前面闪出一位英俊少年英俊的少年不慌不忙从腰间拔出宝剑拔出了宝剑豹子被少年刺翻被少年刺翻姑娘脱离了危险脱离了危险姑娘说她是一位公主啦──啦──啦── 少年说他是一个王子啦──啦──啦── 公主爱上了王子啦──啦──啦── 王子也爱上了公主啦──啦──啦── 公主爱王子啦──啦──啦── 王子爱公主啦──啦──啦── _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2007-01-21 13:18:28 Post subject:

nobody wrote:

那toronto就六更了！搞电脑的三更前就歇的。。。也有。现在差不多是时候将息了。 good night!

咱这纯属于聊大天，岛主会生气地。那，那，就湿一下吧。

假日的夜晚

假日的夜晚多么寂寥
多么寂寥！
听我来唱首爱情小调
爱情小调！

从前有个美丽的姑娘
美丽的姑娘
牵着小鹿在森林里游荡
森林里游荡

忽然旁边跳出一只花豹
一只花豹
姑娘吓得撒腿就跑
撒腿就跑

姑娘跑得慢
啦──啦──啦──
豹子跑得快
啦──啦──啦──

豹子眼看要追上姑娘
啦──啦──啦──
姑娘眼看就要遭殃
啦──啦──啦──

这时前面闪出一位英俊少年
英俊的少年
不慌不忙从腰间拔出宝剑
拔出了宝剑

豹子被少年刺翻
被少年刺翻
姑娘脱离了危险
脱离了危险

姑娘说她是一位公主
啦──啦──啦──
少年说他是一个王子
啦──啦──啦──

公主爱上了王子
啦──啦──啦──
王子也爱上了公主
啦──啦──啦──

公主爱王子
啦──啦──啦──
王子爱公主
啦──啦──啦──

MY GOD. 你不要告诉我这是你罢笔10年后的首发诗 Very Happy

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