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Posted: 2008-02-05 06:31:48 Post subject: 独行

谁的炊烟，袅袅牵出旧的记忆一片叶的语言，描画着荣枯的清晰一个人，穿梭在喧嚣与静寂的边缘异域的雨水，总汇不成你的甘甜你的眼神，亭亭玉立了一截人生没有花的季节，留下风雨漂涤的色彩细弱的脚步，还要独自前行怎样才能，抵达属于我的柳暗花明 02/05/2008[/img]

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Posted: 2008-02-05 10:01:25 Post subject:

额悄悄地捡起落在地上的灯光~~ _________________ 这有点麻烦

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Posted: 2008-02-05 13:19:02 Post subject:

谁的炊烟, 尽是饭菜的香气~~~哈哈~我饿~

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Posted: 2008-02-05 13:20:45 Post subject:

这次竟然最喜欢结尾那句！（你的甘甜）加个例如（给）是不是好一些？（留下风雨滤过的色彩）滤过，这词很想更动。 _________________ 可情可理，去捧就真

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Posted: 2008-02-05 13:23:10 Post subject:

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啥么！啥么也玩唯美？真个是啥么都会！
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这次竟然最喜欢结尾那句！（你的甘甜）加个例如（给）是不是好一些？
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小声问可不可以说"留下风雨漂(涤)染的色彩"

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Posted: 2008-02-05 13:41:33 Post subject:

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诗盗喜裸评 wrote:

这次竟然最喜欢结尾那句！（你的甘甜）加个例如（给）是不是好一些？
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小声问可不可以说"留下风雨漂(涤)染的色彩"

大点声没关系，只要是读者，在落尘都可以大声说话！当然！饿晕的人除外。
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Posted: 2008-02-05 13:46:02 Post subject:

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这次竟然最喜欢结尾那句！（你的甘甜）加个例如（给）是不是好一些？
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你给的甘甜，真是给饭吃哪？
谢你喜欢，偶受宠若惊.

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Posted: 2008-02-05 13:46:47 Post subject:

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詩盜喜裸評 wrote:

这次竟然最喜欢结尾那句！（你的甘甜）加个例如（给）是不是好一些？
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小声问可不可以说"留下风雨漂(涤)染的色彩"

好的。谢艾艾。

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Posted: 2008-02-05 13:57:37 Post subject:

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爱爱 wrote:

诗盗喜裸评 wrote:

这次竟然最喜欢结尾那句！（你的甘甜）加个例如（给）是不是好一些？
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小声问可不可以说"留下风雨漂(涤)染的色彩"

好的。谢艾艾。

黑！真是偏心，我说的从来都质疑，爱爱说的就直接谢啦！
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Posted: 2008-02-05 15:37:54 Post subject:

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黑！真是偏心，我说的从来都质疑，爱爱说的就直接谢啦！

那是当然，　还用来抱怨么

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Posted: 2008-02-05 16:36:50 Post subject:

句子出落得愈发。。。了不起。嗯，俺开车送你一程吧。沿途的风景好像也不错。。。：))) _________________ 瞠目结舌

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句子出落得愈发。。。了不起。
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笑笑你这下夸滴偶瞠目结舌

又: 忘了谢你让我搭车。　我笨，　咋没想到呢 Wink

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Posted: 2008-02-05 17:06:19 Post subject:

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拈花微笑 wrote:

句子出落得愈发。。。了不起。
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笑笑你这下夸滴偶瞠目结舌
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沿途的风景...瞠目结舌
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Posted: 2008-02-05 17:12:53 Post subject:

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沿途的风景...瞠目结舌

那太没诗意了, ８像拈花微笑

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Posted: 2008-02-05 17:21:52 Post subject:

见山是山，见水是水沿途的风景和目的地的风景都是一样的呢。。。为何有分别 _________________ 瞠目结舌

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Posted: 2008-02-05 17:27:15 Post subject:

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见山是山，见水是水
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嗯，以后走路时多看风景

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Posted: 2008-02-06 02:58:56 Post subject:

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黑！真是偏心，我说的从来都质疑，爱爱说的就直接谢啦！

那是当然，　还用来抱怨么

当然要抱哪！不抱白不抱，反正我话多！
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