Maple Review Home
   Chinese Literature Society of North America | Maple Review | Immigrants in Canada | Angel Studio | The Driftwood Artist Society | Ocean of Poetry | Island of Music
"HuaHe Cup" 2007 Chinese Mainland and Oversea Poetry Competition and Non-governmental Magazines and Newspapers Joint Exhibition starts on the first day of 2007.
  
 FAQFAQ   SearchSearch   MemberlistMemberlist   UsergroupsUsergroups   RegisterRegister  ProfileProfile    Log in to check your private messagesLog in to check your private messages   Sign inSign in   BlogsBlogs    Weblogs NewsWeblogs News   AlbumAlbum 
English Home Bilingual Home Chinese Home
Dictionary Check Poems' Rules & Forms Search for Chinese Poems Poetry & Music

Maple Review Home -> 现代诗歌 Post new topic   Reply to topic
随感(添加中)1[2]  Next
半溪明月
榜眼


Joined: 30 Sep 2006
Posts: 4760

半溪明月Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-26 17:41:21    Post subject: 随感(添加中) Reply with quote

随感

文/半溪明月



  1

从一个页面到另一个页面
眼睛刺疼,和疲劳无关
管不住的手指,犯了偷窥的罪

转身,回头,转身......
我在原地做操
动作缓慢,骨头有伤  

  2

寂寞女子,在铜镜里
读月亮。脸上有字
多意。被场景和时间
雕蚀,模糊不清

3

“一人只下,万人之上”
在诗歌的国度
我既是皇后,也是皇上
这话,是谁教的?
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail Blog
杨海军
进士出身


Joined: 01 Mar 2007
Posts: 2205
Location: 吉林
杨海军Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-26 18:40:14    Post subject: Reply with quote

喜欢这样的随感表达方式!诗意透哲理!问候半溪明月诗人!!
_________________
走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮
——拙作《离开村庄》
http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1269376751
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail Blog
nobody
进士出身


Joined: 31 Dec 2006
Posts: 2651
Location: Madtown
nobodyCollection
PostPosted: 2007-09-26 21:50:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

不错,精炼有味。
_________________
I'm nobody! Who are you?
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail Blog
黑雨滴
秀才


Joined: 11 Jun 2007
Posts: 144

黑雨滴Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-27 04:05:20    Post subject: Reply with quote

问好明月,非常的味道的小诗
_________________
个人主页:http://blog.sina.com.cn/afirewang
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
黑雨滴
秀才


Joined: 11 Jun 2007
Posts: 144

黑雨滴Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-27 04:05:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

问好明月,非常有味道的小诗
_________________
个人主页:http://blog.sina.com.cn/afirewang
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
沙漠
秀才


Joined: 26 Jan 2007
Posts: 977
Location: 中国温州
沙漠Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-27 04:09:47    Post subject: Reply with quote

1、2不错。最喜欢2。
_________________
个人博客http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1056295180
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Visit poster's website
山城子
榜眼


Joined: 23 May 2007
Posts: 4771
Location: 中国贵州
山城子Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-27 05:52:12    Post subject: Reply with quote



寂寞女子,在铜镜里
读月亮。脸上有字
多意。一段汉字
被场景和时间
雕蚀,模糊不清

——精彩!
_________________
诗是人生的雅伴儿。
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail Blog
半溪明月
榜眼


Joined: 30 Sep 2006
Posts: 4760

半溪明月Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-27 06:07:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

感谢山城子老师、沙漠、黑雨滴、NOBODY、海军诗人~
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail Blog
刘雨萍
秀才


Joined: 25 Jan 2007
Posts: 226
Location: Houston, TX. U.S.A
刘雨萍Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-27 07:32:42    Post subject: Reply with quote

用诗的思维和语言记录平常生活的随想. 要得.
_________________
隔海抒情
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Visit poster's website
韩少君
进士出身


Joined: 06 Apr 2007
Posts: 2558
Location: 吉林四平
韩少君Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-27 14:50:06    Post subject: Reply with quote

骨头有伤

好!
有感觉!
还有隐痛和思索-----  
_________________
靠才华为自己带来幸福的是才子;靠才华为自己带来痛苦的是诗人!!http://blog.sina.com.cn/hanshaojun345
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail Blog Visit poster's website
荷梦
进士出身


Joined: 19 Dec 2006
Posts: 2826
Location: 湖北,黄梅
荷梦Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-28 05:55:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

转身,回头,转身......
我在原地做操
动作缓慢,骨头有伤——这是让1出彩的结尾,真的给人一种特别的回味。
2我也很喜欢,呵呵,问候明月!
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
桔子
秀才


Joined: 15 May 2007
Posts: 214

桔子Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-30 14:58:58    Post subject: Reply with quote

寂寞女子,在铜镜里
读月亮。脸上有字
多意。一段汉字
被场景和时间
雕蚀,模糊不清
朦胧的美 Very Happy
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Blog
William Zhou周道模
探花


Joined: 10 Jun 2007
Posts: 3950
Location: 中国四川广汉
William Zhou周道模Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-30 19:45:40    Post subject: Reply with quote

我再赞美就累赘了。如要出精品,还是要不“随感”,多思找新意,多改出佳句,与你共勉!
_________________
诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
周道模
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Blog Visit poster's website
白水
大学士


Joined: 02 Oct 2006
Posts: 14102
Location: TORONTO
白水Collection
PostPosted: 2007-09-30 20:47:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

更喜欢2
问好国庆
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Blog
半溪明月
榜眼


Joined: 30 Sep 2006
Posts: 4760

半溪明月Collection
PostPosted: 2007-10-01 05:28:24    Post subject: Reply with quote

感谢雨萍\少君\荷梦\桔子喜欢~周道模说的极是,也有朋友劝我莫写这些,要多思考,多沉淀,可惜脑子空空,没有一点灵感,我还是多看看书才对!感谢你的指导,共勉! Very Happy
楼上各位国庆快乐!
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail Blog
kokho
进士出身


Joined: 30 Nov 2006
Posts: 2642
Location: Singapore
kokhoCollection
PostPosted: 2007-10-01 11:44:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

“一人只下,万人之上”
在诗歌的国度
我既是皇后,也是皇上
这话,是你教的
_____________

没想到呀 :)

。。。。。。
_________________
乒乓、摄影、诗歌
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Blog
William Zhou周道模
探花


Joined: 10 Jun 2007
Posts: 3950
Location: 中国四川广汉
William Zhou周道模Collection
PostPosted: 2007-10-01 15:40:48    Post subject: Reply with quote

感谢明月“明亮”的理解。我来《北美枫》,对空泛的赞美不感兴趣,因为这对自己的进步不起作用。我赞美别人的诗,尽量说具体些。多的是供作者参考的意见和建议。我挂在“西方文学”上的双语诗,一看见高手指出的毛病就高兴。一是我可以再思考再修改再提高,二是我身边找不到这样水平的老师啊!
_________________
诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
周道模
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Blog Visit poster's website
半溪明月
榜眼


Joined: 30 Sep 2006
Posts: 4760

半溪明月Collection
PostPosted: 2007-10-01 22:00:26    Post subject: Reply with quote

kokho wrote:
“一人只下,万人之上”
在诗歌的国度
我既是皇后,也是皇上
这话,是你教的
_____________

没想到呀 :)

。。。。。。


呵呵,KOKHO国庆愉快!你没这样教我吧?:)
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail Blog
半溪明月
榜眼


Joined: 30 Sep 2006
Posts: 4760

半溪明月Collection
PostPosted: 2007-10-01 22:05:03    Post subject: Reply with quote

William Zhou周道模 wrote:
感谢明月“明亮”的理解。我来《北美枫》,对空泛的赞美不感兴趣,因为这对自己的进步不起作用。我赞美别人的诗,尽量说具体些。多的是供作者参考的意见和建议。我挂在“西方文学”上的双语诗,一看见高手指出的毛病就高兴。一是我可以再思考再修改再提高,二是我身边找不到这样水平的老师啊!


完全同意的看法.赞美不是不必要,指出诗歌的毛病不是很了解对方,一般人也许并不好意思给你指出来.我在回帖的时候,也常为该如何写而头疼~
上班去了
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail Blog
一言
秀才


Joined: 21 Feb 2007
Posts: 360

一言Collection
PostPosted: 2007-10-01 23:01:38    Post subject: Reply with quote

试问小女子可否婚嫁,现有月老前来——赠红线一根,每当月亮升起之夜,拜三拜,如意郎君即从天而降,信不信由你哦!
_________________
我是个平凡的人,但我喜欢在平凡的日子里做不平凡的事情,每个人都可以这么来作去认为自己的存在。
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Blog
Display posts from previous:   
Emoticons
Very Happy Smile Sad Surprised
Shocked Confused Cool Laughing
Mad Razz Embarassed Crying or Very sad
Evil or Very Mad Twisted Evil Rolling Eyes Wink
Exclamation Question Idea Arrow
View more Emoticons
1[2]  Next Page 1 of 2           View previous topic View next topic    
Maple Review Home -> 现代诗歌    Post new topic   Reply to topic
Jump to:  


Once you post your works here, that means you submits them to the magazine of Maple Review (North American Maple, or BeiMeiFeng), a bilingual journal published by Chinese Literature Society of North America. The magazine holds the right to translate them into Chinese, and publish them in both languages. You need to be responsible for the copyright issues of your own files uploaded.
Powered by phpBB © 2001, 2005 phpBB Group
phpBB Chinese interface was translated by iCy-fLaME