| 莹雪 进士出身
 
 
 Joined: 28 Sep 2006
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-12 18:26:01    Post subject: 忆秦娥-再赋中秋 |   |  
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				|   丹桂裂,
 微云巧扮天边月,
 天边月,
 清辉尽照,
 又闻蛩咽。
 
 寻幽觅境吟词阕,
 笔挥古韵情飞跃,
 情飞跃,
 恰逢年少,
 怎言愁叠?
 
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		| 晓松 举人
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-12 19:19:10    Post subject: |   |  
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				| “丹桂裂”,开头就不同凡响! 另:寻幽觅境还是寻幽觅静?
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		| 白水 大学士
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-12 21:25:52    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 且将清辉照莹雪, 莫把秋心空对月 
 问好MM
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		| 莹雪 进士出身
 
 
 Joined: 28 Sep 2006
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-12 23:12:36    Post subject: |   |  
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谢谢晓松兄点评 
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	  | “丹桂裂”,开头就不同凡响! 另:寻幽觅境还是寻幽觅静?
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		| 莹雪 进士出身
 
 
 Joined: 28 Sep 2006
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-12 23:15:58    Post subject: |   |  
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嘻嘻,好的,抛却秋心欢醉月 
	  | 白水 Moonlight wrote: |  
	  | 且将清辉照莹雪, 莫把秋心空对月 
 问好MM
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		| 黄洋界 探花
 
  
 Joined: 23 Mar 2007
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 Location: 多伦多,加拿大
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-13 04:41:35    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 图美   词美   诗心美 _________________
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 喜金石书画,友竹菊梅兰
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		| 征尘载袖 秀才
 
  
 Joined: 18 Aug 2007
 Posts: 527
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-13 08:02:23    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 言愁叠,堪搔薄暮渊鱼跃。 渊鱼跃,忧烦漫惹,旧游题阙。
 
 袖罗长笛如风咽,清歌一曲中秋月。
 中秋月,瞧人颜色,剪云缝裂。
 
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		| 莹雪 进士出身
 
 
 Joined: 28 Sep 2006
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-13 16:05:47    Post subject: |   |  
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缝云裂,明眸赏尽游鱼跃, 
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	  | 言愁叠,堪搔薄暮渊鱼跃。 渊鱼跃,忧烦漫惹,旧游题阙。
 
 袖罗长笛如风咽,清歌一曲中秋月。
 中秋月,瞧人颜色,剪云缝裂。
 
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 |  游鱼跃,休愁去恼,畅怀书阙。
 
 微眠入梦寒蛩咽,弄音感叹空中月,
 空中月,会秋萧瑟,冷辉轻叠。
 
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		| 晓松 举人
 
  
 Joined: 26 Feb 2007
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-13 19:18:05    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 二位唱和首尾相接,妙极!咱也试着,开心一刻: 
 
 辉轻叠,迢迢云汉星活跃。
 星活跃,挤眉弄眼,争相望阙。
 
 忽闻人世箫声咽,前来探访窗前月。
 窗前月,柔情似水,抚伤补裂。
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		| jemmy 秀才
 
  
 Joined: 06 Jun 2007
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		| 莹雪 进士出身
 
 
 Joined: 28 Sep 2006
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-13 21:52:25    Post subject: |   |  
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呵呵,回一首。 
	  | 晓松 wrote: |  
	  | 二位唱和首尾相接,妙极!咱也试着,开心一刻: 
 
 辉轻叠,迢迢云汉星活跃。
 星活跃,挤眉弄眼,争相望阙。
 
 忽闻人世箫声咽,前来探访窗前月。
 窗前月,柔情似水,抚伤补裂。
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 伤补裂,湖明秀色观鱼跃,
 观鱼跃,蹙眉愁眼,独依楼阙。
 
 妙音唱尽幽思咽,皎皎又见窗前月,
 窗前月,心如净水,颂秋时节。
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		| 征尘载袖 秀才
 
  
 Joined: 18 Aug 2007
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-14 06:28:09    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 秋时节,香深露屑东窗月。 风摇叶,都将凉意,化成呜咽。
 
 应笑寒蛩歌未阙,瘦肌吹尽阴阴跃。
 清音绝,自生自灭,取身名裂。
 
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		| 戴玨 秀才
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-14 13:52:08    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 依韻和一個,接龍游戲就不玩了: 
 鋪瓊屑,江風動水千山月。
 千山月,栖栖各地,客思長切。
 
 夢中歸路雨初歇,聲聲碎語梧桐葉。
 梧桐葉,曉光浮處,露珠瑩澈。
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 我的blog
 我的專欄
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		| 莹雪 进士出身
 
 
 Joined: 28 Sep 2006
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-14 18:30:22    Post subject: |   |  
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端正节,婆娑倩影歌寒月。 
	  | 征尘载袖 wrote: |  
	  | 秋时节,香深露屑东窗月。 风摇叶,都将凉意,化成呜咽。
 
 应笑寒蛩歌未阙,瘦肌吹尽阴阴跃。
 清音绝,自生自灭,取身名裂。
 
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 |  书红叶,低眉心意,泪飞声咽。
 
 暗悼荷残吟数阙,楚宫身段随风跃。
 言奇绝,叹怀生灭,怎牵名列?
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		| 莹雪 进士出身
 
 
 Joined: 28 Sep 2006
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-14 18:49:38    Post subject: |   |  
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谢谢,也回和一首 
	  | 戴玨 wrote: |  
	  | 依韻和一個,接龍游戲就不玩了: 
 鋪瓊屑,江風動水千山月。
 千山月,栖栖各地,客思長切。
 
 夢中歸路雨初歇,聲聲碎語梧桐葉。
 梧桐葉,曉光浮處,露珠瑩澈。
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 清輝瀉,湖明影照寒空月。
 寒空月,馨芳桂意,旅居思切。
 
 夢遊雲霧無停歇,殷殷秀色霜楓葉。
 霜楓葉,伴菊幽處,露涼瑩澈。
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		| 征尘载袖 秀才
 
  
 Joined: 18 Aug 2007
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-15 14:20:41    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 牵名列,黄花嫩蕊成愁绝。 成愁绝,趁烟思浦,绿琴琼阙。
 
 修岩霖雨劝枫红,朱颜翠发争相咽。
 争相咽,连年奔遂,为谁吟月?
 
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		| 莹雪 进士出身
 
 
 Joined: 28 Sep 2006
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-15 17:52:58    Post subject: |   |  
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谁吟月?凉霜透桂清馨绝。 
	  | 征尘载袖 wrote: |  
	  | 牵名列,黄花嫩蕊成愁绝。 成愁绝,趁烟思浦,绿琴琼阙。
 
 修岩霖雨劝枫红,朱颜翠发争相咽。
 争相咽,连年奔遂,为谁吟月?
 
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 |  清馨绝,弄音南浦,梦中琼阙。
 
 海棠微雨醉颜红,风华年少无悲咽。
 无悲咽,光阴怎逐?志踌休歇。
 
 
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		| 梅影三叠 秀才
 
 
 Joined: 06 Feb 2007
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-15 23:30:22    Post subject: |   |  
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		| 征尘载袖 秀才
 
  
 Joined: 18 Aug 2007
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-16 20:15:48    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 志休歇,而今不道黄花咽。 黄花咽,倩谁传语,微章虚阙。
 
 含羞举步罗轻绝,香娇烟润黄昏月。
 黄昏月,独幽赋冷,嫦娥眉睫。
 
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		| 冰清 同进士出身
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-16 21:08:08    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 好词好和! 
 寻幽觅境吟词阕,
 笔挥古韵情飞跃,
 情飞跃,
 恰逢年少,
 怎言愁叠?
 
 词美,心态更美
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