| 王国京 童生
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-07 17:24:38    Post subject: 诗歌1首,请各位老师赐教!谢 |   |  
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				| 《大白菜》 
 
 饱饮秋风凉雨
 成熟于霜雪中
 自身的老练
 用一层一层的叶子
 保护了自己
 不像别的菜姐妹菜兄弟
 轻易的腐烂变质
 
 如今在这个超市里
 你明码标价
 不和他们比色比贵
 从里到外
 用一颗洁白的心
 体现你生命的价值
 
 
 
 
 作者:王国京
 地址:山东省莱芜市大桥南路19号
 邮编:271100
 E-mail:wang_guojing@sina.com
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		| 白水 大学士
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-07 17:26:57    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 用一颗洁白的心 体现你生命的价值
 
 好! 此诗如此句
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		| 王国京 童生
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-07 18:26:28    Post subject: 谢谢白水老师! |   |  
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				| 谢谢白水老师! |  | 
	
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		| 白水 大学士
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-07 18:38:01    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 千万别称我老师. 诗歌于我只是玩儿  |  | 
	
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		| nobody 进士出身
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-09 00:12:35    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 替大白菜向你表示感谢。  _________________
 I'm nobody! Who are you?
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		| 王国京 童生
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-09 04:38:40    Post subject: 谢谢!nobody |   |  
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				| 问好nobody |  | 
	
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