Lake 举人
  
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				 发表于: 2007-07-15 12:10:01    发表主题: short poems (11-20) | 
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once a garden
 
now the home of wild weeds
 
butterflies left
 
 
12
 
Arid river bank
 
Scorching sand
 
Ducks lazy in water
 
 
13
 
in bloom
 
cherry blossoms
 
transience of life
 
 
14
 
on the waves
 
a boat tossed up and down
 
sky, earth, a lone gull
 
 
15
 
What odds the jackpot?
 
Who cares? ‘Neath a pipal tree,
 
mind moves with clouds
 
 
16
 
You receiving me?
 
Tried in vain. Connection lost. 
 
Stare at a blank screen.
 
 
17
 
Locked in nutty slack
 
angry volcano broke free 
 
and dyed the whole sky 
 
 
18
 
in the beginning……
 
an egg first or a chicken?
 
Kongzi can’t answer
 
 
19
 
What does it all mean?
 
Life, death, friend and enemy-
 
He scratches his head
 
 
20
 
one of those barrels
 
heavier than the others
 
a barrel of fun
 
 
. _________________ the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins | 
			 
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		白水 大学士
  
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				 发表于: 2007-07-16 14:52:29    发表主题:  | 
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				| 慢慢欣赏 | 
			 
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		Lake 举人
  
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				 发表于: 2007-07-17 09:46:01    发表主题:  | 
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不用慢慢。小诗,一目十行,全在视线之内。
 
 
when reaching 100, will stop. _________________ the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins | 
			 
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		William Zhou周道模 探花
 
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				 发表于: 2007-07-24 01:55:17    发表主题:  | 
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				Dear Lake,
 
I like these short English poems. They are deep,humorous and fanciful! _________________ 诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
 
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		Lake 举人
  
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				 发表于: 2007-07-25 07:16:59    发表主题:  | 
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				Thanks William for your read and comment.
 
 
有人批评我的诗,太过于描述,所以试试这类型的小诗,尽量删去多余的词语,以求最简,看能否有所改进。 _________________ the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins | 
			 
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		William Zhou周道模 探花
 
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				 发表于: 2007-07-25 16:57:56    发表主题:  | 
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				赞赏“湖泊”:
 
尤其是14首之类:有象无人,好像无人之境,实则有“人”有境有情有意,人---诗者,化在情景中了。而且意境宏阔,反映了作者的胸襟! _________________ 诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
 
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		kokho 进士出身
  
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				 发表于: 2007-07-29 13:48:30    发表主题:  | 
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				Locked in nutty slack
 
angry volcano broke free
 
and dyed the whole sky 
 
 
很有水准 :)) 
 
 
once a garden
 
now the home of wild weeds
 
butterflies left 
 
 
这首 成就在这贴里面 最高 !!!
 
 
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		Lake 举人
  
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				 发表于: 2007-07-30 09:54:03    发表主题:  | 
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				Thanks William and Kokho for your possitive comments.
 
 
Still in learning process...
 
 
Regards,
 
Lake _________________ the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins | 
			 
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				 发表于: 2007-07-30 10:29:48    发表主题:  | 
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				还有吗?let your horse come           
 
 
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		Lake 举人
  
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				 发表于: 2007-07-30 15:28:35    发表主题:  | 
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	  还有吗?let your horse come           
 
 
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你是说:放马过来?
 
那,我就 give you some color to see see 给你点颜色看看
 
 
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				 发表于: 2007-07-30 21:53:53    发表主题:  | 
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				lake reflects rainbows of colour  ) 
 
 
      
 
 
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