天淡云闲 童生
Joined: 24 Mar 2007 Posts: 74
天淡云闲Collection |
Posted: 2007-06-07 06:47:01 Post subject: 六月的麦田 |
|
|
六月的麦田
文/天淡云闲
六月,风
说着情话
抚过丰满的麦田
麦穗打开羞涩
于农民上扬的语调里
收获 一镰之缘
我激情的手指
播响季节的琴弦
抑 扬 顿 挫中
解读岁月的漂染
如今,麦田沉甸甸
我留下一首虚空的诗
坐回窗前 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
hepingdao Site Admin

Joined: 25 May 2006 Posts: 8106
hepingdaoCollection |
Posted: 2007-06-07 07:05:47 Post subject: |
|
|
我激情的手指
播响季节的琴弦
抑 扬 顿 挫中
解读岁月的漂染
暗扣写诗
倒是很自然 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫! |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
韩少君 进士出身

Joined: 06 Apr 2007 Posts: 2558 Location: 吉林四平 韩少君Collection |
Posted: 2007-06-07 14:31:11 Post subject: |
|
|
如今,麦田沉甸甸
我留下一首虚空的诗
坐回窗前
谁家风筝吹断线,落在画堂西。
你的窗子面向麦田,麦芒痒痒地爬上窗台—— _________________ 靠才华为自己带来幸福的是才子;靠才华为自己带来痛苦的是诗人!!http://blog.sina.com.cn/hanshaojun345 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
杨海军 进士出身
Joined: 01 Mar 2007 Posts: 2205 Location: 吉林 杨海军Collection |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
天淡云闲 童生
Joined: 24 Mar 2007 Posts: 74
天淡云闲Collection |
Posted: 2007-06-09 00:22:03 Post subject: |
|
|
hepingdao wrote: |
我激情的手指
播响季节的琴弦
抑 扬 顿 挫中
解读岁月的漂染
暗扣写诗
倒是很自然 |
问候和平!谢你鼓励 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
天淡云闲 童生
Joined: 24 Mar 2007 Posts: 74
天淡云闲Collection |
Posted: 2007-06-09 01:08:09 Post subject: |
|
|
韩少君 wrote: |
如今,麦田沉甸甸
我留下一首虚空的诗
坐回窗前
谁家风筝吹断线,落在画堂西。
你的窗子面向麦田,麦芒痒痒地爬上窗台—— |
问好朋友。谢提读 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
天淡云闲 童生
Joined: 24 Mar 2007 Posts: 74
天淡云闲Collection |
Posted: 2007-06-09 01:09:54 Post subject: |
|
|
杨海军 wrote: |
后一节较好,前面有些淡了,问候天闲云淡诗人!!  |
感谢朋友直言。问好。 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
赵福治 探花

Joined: 30 May 2006 Posts: 3456 Location: 中国北京 赵福治Collection |
Posted: 2007-06-09 03:39:05 Post subject: |
|
|
情感饱满,娴熟的语言. |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
半溪明月 榜眼

Joined: 30 Sep 2006 Posts: 4760
半溪明月Collection |
Posted: 2007-06-09 08:06:08 Post subject: |
|
|
六月该是收获的季节了,问好云闲,状态不错哦~ |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
天淡云闲 童生
Joined: 24 Mar 2007 Posts: 74
天淡云闲Collection |
Posted: 2007-06-11 19:40:55 Post subject: |
|
|
问好福治!鼓励的同时别忘指点 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
天淡云闲 童生
Joined: 24 Mar 2007 Posts: 74
天淡云闲Collection |
Posted: 2007-06-11 20:01:17 Post subject: |
|
|
半溪明月 wrote: |
六月该是收获的季节了,问好云闲,状态不错哦~ |
谢明月提读。问好! |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
燕庄生铁 秀才
Joined: 06 May 2007 Posts: 116
燕庄生铁Collection |
Posted: 2007-06-11 23:13:58 Post subject: |
|
|
自然。问好 |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
|