qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
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Posted: 2015-07-17 07:24:40 Post subject: 球赛 |
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球赛
----赠诗社群友
大地一球场,
球队分两方。
经纬划边界,
群山来观赏。
太阳是排球,
月亮作乒乓。
东边发球,旭日东升飞天际,
西边拦网,夕阳西下接球忙。
绿草场上微风动,
飘然紫气在东方。
无悔积分归一零,
林荫大道连边疆。
同悲共喜,
胜负分享。
但愿球赛无终时,
日升月落天地长。 |
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博弈 榜眼
Joined: 21 Dec 2006 Posts: 4381 Location: SFO 博弈Collection |
Posted: 2015-07-17 07:57:02 Post subject: |
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qinghongh wrote: |
太阳是排球,
月亮作乒乓。 |
的確,好象想! _________________ (在不斷的審醜裡終將建立起新的審美) |
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qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
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Posted: 2015-07-17 13:04:44 Post subject: |
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博弈 wrote: |
qinghongh wrote: |
太阳是排球,
月亮作乒乓。 |
的確,好象想! |
谢谢! |
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hepingdao Site Admin

Joined: 25 May 2006 Posts: 8106
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Posted: 2015-07-17 18:18:09 Post subject: |
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构想已经出来了
语言上可以更生活化
有进步 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫! |
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qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
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Posted: 2015-07-18 02:01:44 Post subject: |
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hepingdao wrote: |
构想已经出来了
语言上可以更生活化
有进步 |
谢谢岛兄!我很少写新诗,还有待多学习。 |
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游戏诗歌 秀才
Joined: 21 Jun 2006 Posts: 618 Location: 吉林省和龙市华林路64-12-1号 游戏诗歌Collection |
Posted: 2015-07-18 04:18:00 Post subject: |
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但愿人间和平,球赛开场。 |
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qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
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Posted: 2015-07-18 05:28:07 Post subject: |
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谢谢! |
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游戏诗歌 秀才
Joined: 21 Jun 2006 Posts: 618 Location: 吉林省和龙市华林路64-12-1号 游戏诗歌Collection |
Posted: 2015-07-18 18:15:09 Post subject: |
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这首诗气场强大,胸怀宽广。 |
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