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车走了,载满我的忧伤 (原创新诗)
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PostPosted: 2013-05-03 05:34:47    Post subject: 车走了,载满我的忧伤 (原创新诗) Reply with quote

在清晨七点二十分滨河东路对面,
是站着一个左顾右盼的姑娘,
双手拎着一个袋子顾步自怜,
忽然一辆车遮住了我的视线,
车走了,载满我的忧伤。

车走了,载满我的忧伤,
忽然一辆车遮住了我的视线,
双手拎着一个袋子顾步自怜,
是站着一个左顾右盼的姑娘,
在清晨七点二十分滨河东路对面。
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PostPosted: 2013-05-03 18:19:52    Post subject: Reply with quote

段落回环!
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PostPosted: 2013-05-03 22:15:49    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢你的光临!这是我的一次尝试。
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PostPosted: 2013-05-04 09:17:17    Post subject: Reply with quote

这样也是一个有趣的尝试。
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PostPosted: 2013-05-04 09:29:36    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢光临。欢迎指点。
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PostPosted: 2013-05-05 00:12:24    Post subject: Reply with quote

第一次读到这种形式的诗,学习!
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PostPosted: 2013-05-05 13:24:59    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢远狼。
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