青洋 秀才

Joined: 25 Sep 2012 Posts: 342 Location: 溫哥華 青洋Collection |
Posted: 2012-10-03 02:01:17 Post subject: 落葉 |
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落葉
一張張筋脉裸露, 饱经风霜的手
绿色血液正渐渐
枯竭
行走的鞋子们,带来
沙尘暴
于是你有了老年斑
一阵风
帮你翻身
手心朝上
问天 _________________ 坐在方舟中的無用之人天天射落日的倒影 |
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hepingdao Site Admin

Joined: 25 May 2006 Posts: 8106
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Posted: 2012-10-03 03:23:34 Post subject: |
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很形象化 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫! |
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青洋 秀才

Joined: 25 Sep 2012 Posts: 342 Location: 溫哥華 青洋Collection |
Posted: 2012-10-03 05:21:55 Post subject: |
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謝謝島主鼓勵。 _________________ 坐在方舟中的無用之人天天射落日的倒影 |
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杯中冲浪 进士出身
Joined: 29 Sep 2006 Posts: 2891 Location: 中国 杯中冲浪Collection |
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青洋 秀才

Joined: 25 Sep 2012 Posts: 342 Location: 溫哥華 青洋Collection |
Posted: 2012-10-04 01:15:03 Post subject: |
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也向您問好,謝謝來讀我的詩。 _________________ 坐在方舟中的無用之人天天射落日的倒影 |
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风动 秀才
Joined: 15 Dec 2006 Posts: 290
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Posted: 2012-10-05 10:33:01 Post subject: |
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抓住了落叶的命脉,“手心朝上
问天”有意思。 |
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青洋 秀才

Joined: 25 Sep 2012 Posts: 342 Location: 溫哥華 青洋Collection |
Posted: 2012-10-07 08:14:38 Post subject: |
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风动 wrote: |
抓住了落叶的命脉,“手心朝上
问天”有意思。 |
問天,落葉之悲憤在於這一問。 _________________ 坐在方舟中的無用之人天天射落日的倒影 |
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