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				|  Posted: 2012-10-03 02:01:17    Post subject: 落葉 |   |  
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				| 落葉 
 
 一張張筋脉裸露, 饱经风霜的手
 绿色血液正渐渐
 枯竭
 行走的鞋子们,带来
 沙尘暴
 于是你有了老年斑
 一阵风
 帮你翻身
 手心朝上
 问天
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				|  Posted: 2012-10-03 03:23:34    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 很形象化 _________________
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		| 青洋 秀才
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2012-10-03 05:21:55    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 謝謝島主鼓勵。 _________________
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		| 青洋 秀才
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2012-10-04 01:15:03    Post subject: |   |  
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 也向您問好,謝謝來讀我的詩。
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				|  Posted: 2012-10-05 10:33:01    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 抓住了落叶的命脉,“手心朝上 问天”有意思。
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				|  Posted: 2012-10-07 08:14:38    Post subject: |   |  
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	  | 风动 wrote: |  
	  | 抓住了落叶的命脉,“手心朝上 问天”有意思。
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 問天,落葉之悲憤在於這一問。
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