莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2011-01-12 18:00:34 Post subject: |
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欣赏 |
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白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2011-01-14 13:47:09 Post subject: |
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谢MM  |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2011-01-14 18:00:42 Post subject: |
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偶好不容易爬上来。中途被摔下网站N多次,呜呜呜,姐姐 |
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白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2011-01-14 18:59:50 Post subject: |
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MM小心噢,你摔痛了白大帅哥会心痛的  |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2011-01-14 19:17:34 Post subject: |
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是姐姐呀,还是‘帅哥’? 偶不管,就叫你姐姐 |
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白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2011-01-14 19:28:45 Post subject: |
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不行,这周是GG, 下周再当JJ。 我家小狗狗最近比较调皮,我要学的利害点。
看看喜欢不
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2011-01-14 22:02:48 Post subject: |
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哦,原来还有星期之分?偶明明白啦! |
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清水正夫 童生
Joined: 14 Jan 2011 Posts: 40 Location: 中国昆明 清水正夫Collection |
Posted: 2011-01-14 22:23:03 Post subject: |
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白水兄诗才令酒仙摔碗叫绝;才子脱帽鞠躬。 |
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白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2011-01-15 06:21:05 Post subject: |
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莹雪 wrote: |
哦,原来还有星期之分?偶明明白啦! |
GG也55 一次,MM不喜欢GG的小狗狗么?  |
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白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2011-01-15 06:26:23 Post subject: |
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清水正夫 wrote: |
白水兄诗才令酒仙摔碗叫绝;才子脱帽鞠躬。 |
谢谢鼓励,问好才子。
清水就好,干嘛非加正夫,这笔名不像‘才子’倒想像‘鬼子’。Sorry, 开个玩笑  |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2011-01-15 17:36:25 Post subject: |
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白水 Moonlight wrote: |
莹雪 wrote: |
哦,原来还有星期之分?偶明明白啦! |
GG也55 一次,MM不喜欢GG的小狗狗么?  |
嘻, GG也像偶们女孩儿似的哭鼻子呀?!记住哦,本周你是才子,是不能哭鼻子地 偶可记住啦!一周轮换制,下周恢复你才女身份哈
偶给你家狗狗 写诗啦!别哭了 |
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白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2011-02-19 09:12:19 Post subject: |
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HI, MM, 写诗歌了  |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2011-02-19 22:32:34 Post subject: |
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白水 Moonlight wrote: |
HI, MM, 写诗歌了  |
O,好的,JJ,是和《冬絮》呀? 偶构思一下下哈 明天交作业  |
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白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2011-02-20 04:39:58 Post subject: |
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不是啦,是等你写新诗歌,比如 春花  |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2011-02-20 17:13:35 Post subject: |
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白水 Moonlight wrote: |
不是啦,是等你写新诗歌,比如 春花  |
哦,明白啦!偶在构思之中。JJ |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2011-02-20 19:04:33 Post subject: |
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JJ,偶写完啦!没敢发论坛上,在你能看到的〔博客〕地方  |
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老山 秀才
Joined: 05 May 2007 Posts: 319
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Posted: 2011-02-20 19:13:25 Post subject: |
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私心最赏颔联并尾联,欣喜之情态可感也。
拂夜梦之拂,入声,最好用平声,似更见音律之美。孔见参酌。
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我也用惯了平水韵,但如果从“新声新韵”的角度看,是符合格律的。用普通话读全诗仍有音律之美。 |
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白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2011-02-20 19:46:26 Post subject: |
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莹雪 wrote: |
JJ,偶写完啦!没敢发论坛上,在你能看到的〔博客〕地方  |
为什么不发这边?新浪那边今天不稳定,很难登陆  |
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白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2011-02-20 19:51:28 Post subject: |
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老山 wrote: |
私心最赏颔联并尾联,欣喜之情态可感也。
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谢谢老山的鼓励。
我的确更喜欢普通话  |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2011-02-20 21:21:43 Post subject: |
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好的,偶发过来!  |
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