Angry Summer

[Lake]

Angry Summer

Don’t be rhetorical, my dear, don’t be rhetorical
when you decide to leave but say it's fate I suppose.
Don’t roll ephemeral ever forever off your tongue
for who'd tune an ear to a solemnly flippant oath.

Don’t hide behind an email with heart wrenching
words like a woman wearing a veil wets her handkerchief.
It’s time when water subsides, rocks emerge
I’ll laugh off this angry summer with a joyous grief.

The moon's never been this huge this round this orange
as I drive up the top of the hillside, seeing her full visage.
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[justjust123]

on the top of a hill, you gaze upon the moon, bright and yet silent. then you look down and see another moon in water. suddenly fish leap everywhere . o, there are more fish in the sea.

the line 'It’s the time when...' does not sound right, it seems

[Lake]

Thanks Just for the read. I thought it'd sink to the bottom of the page without any comments.

Can you elaborate on why the line doesn't sound right?

Thanks.
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[justjust123]

When I was reading the line, I thought you meant : It’s time for water to subside and rocks to emerge.
If 'when' has to be used, this to me sounds a little more natural though I prefer the one above:
Now is the time when water subsides and rocks emerge.
Somehow, I do not feel 'it' and 'when' match here. Of course, I may be wrong.

[Lake]

Now I see. I guess there's some difference between the two, is there?

Anyway, this is a tired expression. I don't quite like it.

Thanks for the explanation.
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins