| 昕阳一片 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2010-05-04 04:31:12    Post subject: 七律•春 |   |  
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				| 七律•春 
 昕阳一片
 
 春风一缕自东来,大地生机接续开.
 杨柳葳蕤借水映,樱桃妩媚就亭偎.
 幽鸣顿起莺声闹,暴拨应凭竹节猜.
 始信青君深暖意,沧溟万丈亦心恢.
 
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		| 笑聊 探花
 
 
 Joined: 05 Jan 2010
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				|  Posted: 2010-05-04 04:55:51    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 杨柳葳蕤借水映,樱桃妩媚恋亭偎 
 欣赏并问好!
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		| 白云闲人 探花
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2010-05-04 06:54:10    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 杨柳葳蕤、樱桃妩媚、莺声闹 --- 構成一幅春图! 請教:在如此旖旎的春图中,却在结句使用"堪哀"?不协全诗情调!
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 诗中岁月,
 笛里关山.
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		| 崔光全 童生
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2010-05-04 15:08:55    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 不错,欣赏了 |  | 
	
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		| 昕阳一片 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2010-05-08 02:36:18    Post subject: |   |  
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	  | 笑聊 wrote: |  
	  | 杨柳葳蕤借水映,樱桃妩媚恋亭偎 
 欣赏并问好!
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		| 昕阳一片 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2010-05-08 02:37:14    Post subject: |   |  
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	  | 白云闲人 wrote: |  
	  | 杨柳葳蕤、樱桃妩媚、莺声闹 --- 構成一幅春图! ...
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 谢谢。略改。问好!
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		| 昕阳一片 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2010-05-08 02:37:51    Post subject: |   |  
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 谢鼓励。问好!
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