zhangmin 秀才

Joined: 13 Mar 2007 Posts: 450 Location: 中国.江苏.张家港 zhangminCollection |
Posted: 2007-03-13 02:50:27 Post subject: 雨的记忆 |
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抓不住热情,纷飞
和季节的眼泪,撒下记忆
我走向你的雨天,忧伤
如纯洁地白,洒落一树绿叶
用烟雾挽留,没有敷衍
一朵花开下,依稀的雨季
阳光,背影,早已离去
谁打碎指尖的晶莹,用一缕音乐
送行。如窗外的勿忘我
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三色堇 秀才
Joined: 25 Nov 2006 Posts: 148 Location: 西安 三色堇Collection |
Posted: 2007-03-13 03:06:07 Post subject: |
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结尾收的太急促了...... |
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左岸 秀才
Joined: 12 Oct 2006 Posts: 215 Location: 中国大连 左岸Collection |
Posted: 2007-03-13 14:30:05 Post subject: |
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意象好,有断层的美。 _________________ 黑暗怎样焊住灵魂的银河 |
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赵福治 探花

Joined: 30 May 2006 Posts: 3456 Location: 中国北京 赵福治Collection |
Posted: 2007-03-13 18:35:33 Post subject: |
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用烟雾挽留,没有敷衍
一朵花开下,依稀的雨季
阳光,背影,早已离去
.....典雅之美.提读. |
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